Hey, found it.
Pretty good, man, I liked it. Could've used some revision to fix up those minor errors, but you said it was uneditted so it's fine.
I really like this metaphor, and makes it seem like regret is something so far away that you'll never be touched, but it comes faster than you'd like. I also like how you repeated the 'tall graceful pillars of stone' bit, because for me it emboldens strength and how easy it's knocked over. I hope that was intentional (the repetition, at least, not my take on it).My regret is a tornado in the distance
Yet harsh and suddenly it is upon me
Rushing about, slamming blocks into other blocks
Sending what used to be tall gracefull pillars of stone
Overall, good stuff. Free verse is always fun because you can take it any way. Have any other poems?




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