My Tragic novel.

**xcrissxcrossx** · 06-29-2007 10:20 PM

This story is based on if the USSR kept the Nazi's for theirselves instead of executing them.

PART 1
Ok its World War II. During the Nuremburg trials Stalin jokingly says that he wants to execute 50000-100000 Nazi’s and Franklin Roosevelt says that 49000 would be a better number. Stalin avoids the German getting killed with his quick joke and recruits them to the USSR.
The communists forced the Nazis to become communist or die. They agree and decide to take over Europe and Asia together. Nazi Germany takes over Western Europe with USSR's help and the USSR takes over the Northern Asia.
With Europe under the Nazi rule, the Nazis rebel against the communists, which they despised. With Western Europe under control, they declared war on the USSR. USA knows that if the Nazis win, Europe and Asia will be Nazi, and if the USSR wins, Europe and Asia will be communist, so they join the war and start WWIII.
While the Nazi’s try to break through the iron curtain, USA launches an attack against Nazi England. Since most of the Nazi forces are in central Europe trying to take back the east, USA easily wins back England. England becomes part of the US.
The Germans Go back to France to try to hold off the US, And the USSR takes over the Rest of Germany; Which Destroys the Nazi's who submit to the US. The US takes back the rest of Europe west of Germany.

PART 2
The Cold war begins, and since the US also owns France, England, and Spain, Russia thinks its chances of beating the US are 0. So it sends nukes toward the US in an attempt to take Europe for them. They succeed and Russia ends up taking Europe and the USA is a desolate wasteland.
Russia takes the rest of Asia and eventually even takes Alaska back, which the USSR didn’t nuke because it knew Russia was no threat.
While the USSR has its defenses down, A US military base in Hawaii Takes India, which has enough population to start another army. the USSR has so few forces in southern Asia, that it doesn’t even notice until a year later, when the united States of India create an army big enough to take the middle eastern countries 1 by 1.
Once they reach the African border, The USI notice that the USSR didn’t even care about Africa. The USI (United States of India) Persuade the Africans to join against the communists.

TO BE CONTINUED…

**BeautifulDreamer** · 06-30-2007 12:07 AM

Wow.

Is that your story? Or summary? Either way- It sucks, seems badly written, and is full of garbage. United States of India? Seriously?

Remember when I was messing with zoo york? You said 'BeautifulDreamer needs ot (sic) get a life' You need ot get a better story.

**xcrissxcrossx** · 06-30-2007 07:22 AM

Originally Posted by BeautifulDreamer

Wow.

Is that your story? Or summary? Either way- It sucks, seems badly written, and is full of garbage. United States of India? Seriously?

Remember when I was messing with zoo york? You said 'BeautifulDreamer needs ot (sic) get a life' You need ot get a better story.

You did need to get a life. Zoo york did nothing wrong and you were saying that he posted too much, which even if it was the case, you were just trying to get him in trouble for something as stupid as too many posts.

**BeautifulDreamer** · 06-30-2007 08:14 AM

XD!

We both know that I was joking. He was an annoying user who posted two word answers and I pointed it out. And he obviously didn't get in trouble, so please. You need ot get a better case against me.

And besides, the story still sucks.

**BLUELINE976** · 06-30-2007 10:52 AM

Originally Posted by BeautifulDreamer

XD!

We both know that I was joking. He was an annoying user who posted two word answers and I pointed it out. And he obviously didn't get in trouble, so please. You need ot get a better case against me.

And besides, the story still sucks.

I'm gonna have to agree with the last part

**Merlock** · 06-30-2007 11:07 AM

The phrase "Nazi England" alone has disturbed me to the depths of my soul.

**xcrissxcrossx** · 06-30-2007 06:04 PM

heres a map of the current situation

**BLUELINE976** · 07-01-2007 11:32 AM

The world has turned into giant colored squares? NOOO!!

**wasup** · 07-01-2007 12:09 PM

I think my brain exploded

**wasup** · 07-01-2007 12:10 PM

but don't quit your day job

**Goldney** · 07-01-2007 03:48 PM

So the US is no longer the US; it's really Europe and Asia?

**xcrissxcrossx** · 07-02-2007 10:11 AM

Originally Posted by goldney

So the US is no longer the US; it's really Europe and Asia?

Actually Africa and Southern Asia. All of Europe is owned by the communists. Its hard to tell with the map, but its in the story.

**Alex D** · 07-02-2007 11:05 AM

Where is the tragedy?

**Caliban44** · 07-04-2007 05:12 PM

Is the tragedy that you will some day realize how poor your creative talent is?

Read a lot of books (and i mean real literature), turn off the TV, and if you can, stay off the computer. If you have an office job, quit it, and if you live in a concrete jungle, get out.

That's the best advice I can give you.

**.:Rob:.** · 07-04-2007 05:30 PM

I don't get it. Is that first post you made actually part of the story? Because it looks more like a summary. There's no real plot or even characters. I agree with Caliban44. Read some more books by real recognised authors and learn from them.

**bro** · 07-07-2007 03:45 PM

Well, I don't want to be mean, and say you suck, listen dude, perhaps this is not your field.

To be honest, -I couldn't follow your storyline
- Be clearer as to why it is a tragedy
-You've gotta be less cheesy, as in "United States of India"
-It's okay to write a story/novel/whatever about the ending of
World War 2 and the beggining of a theoretical 3rd world war, but you've gotta make it more reasonable, and less far fatched. Make it like a continuation of the 2nd WW and not far fetched ideas that have no true connection. Focus on a small portion of the world even, and a fictional 3rd world war, but be clearer, more concise, and creative, and don't attempt too much so you get overwhelmed and let the quality become terrible.
-fix your syntax and grammar
-and please make your map clearer, and not just squares. You can do it in 5 min. on MS paint!

I wish you luck, and definetly as others reccomended, read some real novels, learn from them, it can only help you, even if you only take a few things away.

**wasup** · 07-07-2007 04:13 PM

poor criss cross...

**Sornaensis** · 07-07-2007 04:15 PM

More like "Poor eyes" ouch, they burned :'( :-x

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