Thread: Editing/Revisions/Proof-Reading Department

Spoiler for Small change. v.2.36:

You may think that noticing the difference between the real world and the dream world is quite difficult, when in actuality, it does not have to be. Essentially, you are required to observe your surroundings and situations, examine them, and in turn question whatever strange occurrences you notice. It is unwise to sufficiently accept the explanation that your dream world has made for you.

In the dream world, many things can alert you of the fact that you are dreaming. Clocks may be set wrong or they may be incomprehensible. Text of any form can be blurry and read differently at a second glance. Your hands may look distorted, for example, not having the correct amount of fingers (or even having multiple hands!). The architecture of buildings and the geography of places you may be [are] familiar with may also be different. Colors may appear distorted or unusual on certain objects, people, or creatures; hues becoming more intense and vivid or faded and dull than usual. In general, your dream world could be rife with so much oddity and weirdness that it would seem you would have to be insane to miss it; i.e., flying cabinets, blue pigs, your mom with a beard , and so forth.

If you can successfully notice these dream signs, then you are well on your way to lucid dreaming.

To clarify, a dream sign is something that happens repeatedly in your dreams or as a recurring element; i.e., water, school, having to use the restroom, driving, eating, etc. If you do reality checks [see Kromoh chapter 4] whenever you see or think about your dream sign in real life or when something happens out of the ordinary, you will build a reality checking habit that carries over into your dreams. Possibly making you become aware in the dream.

It was just a small change that I did. So hope it's ok. Feel free to take it out if you don't like it.

Spoiler for V. 2.37:

Spoiler for Small change. v.2.36:
You may think that noticing the difference between the real world and the dream world is quite difficult, when in actuality, it does not have to be. Essentially, you are required to observe your surroundings and situations, examine them, and in turn question whatever strange occurrences you notice. It is unwise to sufficiently accept the explanation that your dream world has made for you.

In the dream world, many things can alert you of the fact that you are dreaming. Clocks may be set wrong or they may be incomprehensible. Text of any form can be blurry and read differently at a second glance. Your hands may look distorted, for example, not having the correct amount of fingers (or even having multiple hands!). The architecture of buildings and the geography of places you may be familiar with may also be different. Colors may appear distorted or unusual on certain objects, people, or creatures; hues becoming more intense and vivid or faded and dull than usual. In general, your dream world could be rife with so much oddity and weirdness that it would seem you would have to be insane to miss it; i.e., flying cabinets, blue pigs, your mom with a beard , and so forth.

If you can successfully notice these dream signs, then you are well on your way to lucid dreaming.

To clarify, a dream sign is something that happens repeatedly in your dreams or as a recurring element; i.e., water, school, having to use the restroom, driving, eating, etc. If you do reality checks [see Kromoh chapter 4] whenever you see or think about your dream sign in real life or when something happens out of the ordinary, you will build a reality checking habit that carries over into your dreams. And the habit, if successfully created and maintained, will lead to you becoming aware of the fact that you are dreaming

i know im not in the edit department but w/e

The reason why I edited so much was because I wanted to eliminate the use of 'may,' it was killing the narrative. I think it was fine where DoD had it. Sorry guys.

Hey, I tried.

OK, yeah wow. Thanks everyone. I'll go over these new versions and see what we can use.

Just a little note - If a piece has obviously been edited by several people then it's probably best to move on to another. We don't want to keep nitpicking a piece apart to death

I'll post a final draft this weekend. Thanks again!!!!

When ever you think you can add something to the piece

Good work guys, looks awesome

IMPORTANT - ALL EDITING STAFF PLEASE READ

I think you all are doing a fantastic job but I'm not entirely sure why Banana's post was in here for editing when he's not currently writing a chapter nor is there any guarantee that that post will be used at all. Originally, Naiya wanted other writers to help aid the main authors of the chapters currently being written (those being chapters two and three). If that post was created with the intent of aiding the authors of chapters two and three then it should have been placed in the chapter writing department first before it went to revisions. Once again, presupposing it was created to aid them, Naiya or ca1um132 would have then said something about its relevancy before the post went to revisions.

This is just so we won't be wasting the editors time having them edit information that the authors at this time were unaware about

In the future, perhaps someone should approve a post (that needs editing) before it gets sent to the revisions department.

Banana, this is not to say that you are doing a bad job at all, hell no. If that post was meant to help the authors of 2 and 3 then you're doing as Naiya asked (by working on chapters together as a whole). If that post was meant to be independent of the currently active chatpers then that's going against what she has asked and the editing department staff basically edited a post that may not be used at all.

Chatper 2 is about the history of lucid dreaming and chapter 3 is about the physiological aspects of dreaming btw.

I propose that all original submitted works thought relevant to "active" chapters, be posted in the writing department for the author(s) of the active chapter(s) to approve or disapprove of that work in the sense of it being useful and whether it should be sent to revisions and then BACK to the writing department...or not. What say you?

Ok, jeff thats fine.

I just thought it wouldd be a good idea to get that one started but w/e

I guess ill start working on helping with the active chapters.

YES Thank you Jeff!!

You said it better than I could. I was thinking the same thing and was confused on where exactly Banana's post would be used.

Let's all do as Jeff said; once a work has been approved by one of the writers THEN it can go to Editing/Revising for us to correct as we find necessary.

Thank you again for the clarification. If any of you have any questions don't hesitate to PM Jeff, myself or CB.

Thanks!!

I'm reporting in.
I feel horribly behind in all of this.

What exactly should I be editing/Where do I go to find things to edit?

Originally Posted by Anonymoose

I'm reporting in.
I feel horribly behind in all of this.

What exactly should I be editing/Where do I go to find things to edit?

Lol you're just fine Moosey. Work that needs editing will be posted in here after it's been approved for editing by the authors of whatever chapter(s) are active at this time.

By active, I mean being written. Currently chapters 2 and 3 are being written and the authors of those chapters are ca1um132 and Naiya.

If there are any tasks/work the Department Leader's in here (dreamingofdreaming and CoLd BlooDed) may need completed aside from the work being written, they'll say so in here or PM you.

To the best of my knowledge, there currently isn't any work pending. But just to be sure, check with DoD and CB.

p.s.: When Naiya and ca1um132 post the rough drafts of their chapters, there will be a lot more work in here to do.

Oh all righty. I was scared that there was a lot of work to do and I wasn't helping at all.

Thanks Jeffy.

^ ^ Thanks again Moosey

Hey all! It's been a slow week for this department as all our fabulous researchers and writers are scrambling their brains together to get some good drafts for us to look at... We should have stuff up shortly.

Spoiler for A little side note:

These past two weeks have been very busy for me as I'm moving out of my apartment, have family coming into town from all over and this week is my last week at the job I'm at currently at (will start a new assignment end of Aug). I will also be gone this weekend until Monday and then will leave again from Tues to the following Sunday or Monday. So, please excuse my lack of presence for the time being. CoLd BlooDed is aware and will be in full charge to take any questions and to lead any revisions that need to take place.

I hope to see the rest of the folks in this department checking in before the week is out!!!

<3 dreamingofdreaming

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Originally Posted by Naiya

Here is part one of Chapter 3. I included two more references which will be at the bottom. Researchers, please fact check.

I'll ask someone with time in Editing to take a look as this is still needs editing. Special thank you to Kromoh for allowing me to copy some of his work on the stages of sleep!


The Science of Sleep and Dreaming (Tentative Title)

Humanity has been dreaming since the beginning of our existence. Throughout history and all the ages, mystics, shamans, witch doctors, yogis and the like have attempted to understand sleep, dreams and their meanings.

Nathaniel Kleitman was a professor who established the world's first sleep laboratory in 1925 at the University of Chicago. He and a graduate student by the name of Eugene Aserinsky can be considered the fathers of the study of sleep.

After hours of watching subjects sleep, Kleitman and Aserinsky discovered REM sleep. With further study they were able to find that REM sleep coincided with the dream state, and so the physiology of sleep and dreams was finally given its first true foundations in science.

Ever since their discovery, science has been able to uncover more about the stages of sleep and the nature of each stage.

Measuring brain activity in a sleeping person, scientists discovered that sleep consists of repetitive cycles of brain activity, during which you go through every important part of sleep. These cycles have a duration of around 90 minutes, and change slightly depending on how long you have been sleeping for.

The very first stage (N1) is not necessarily sleep, but rather a beginning to sleep. It is a transition from wakefulness to sleep, often referred to as somnolence. Slowly, brain activity lowers, and the brain enters the sleep process. This is the stage during which hypnic jerks occur.

The following stage (N2) is responsible for around 50% of total sleep. Muscular activity lowers and consciousness of the external environment disappears.

Stage N3 works primarily as a transition period from stage 2 to the deepest stage 4. This is the stage in which night terrors, bedwetting, sleepwalking and sleep-talking occur.

Stage N4, together with stage N3, are considered to be what is called "deep sleep". Brain activity is the lowest, though it is lower on N4. They are considered to be essential for rest, and, together with REM (further below), will rebound in the next night if a person is deprived of them in one night of sleep. Also, trying to wake someone up during deep sleep can prove extremely difficult depending on the person.

The final stage to mention is REM, or Rapid Eye Movement sleep. It is so called because of the rapid movements of the eyes during this phase. Mental activity raises and the brain behaves similar to that of a person who is meditating. For Lucid Dreaming, this is perhaps the most important sleep phase, as it is theorised that the majority of dreams occur during REM sleep. Furthermore, some neurotransmitters in the brain, such as seratonin, are completely shut down, thus inducing what is called sleep atonia (popularly named Sleep Paralysis), during which motor functions do not work. The person is rendered physically motionless, and based on that comes a possible explanation of what dreams are.


This theory, given shape to by Dr. Stephen LaBerge, will be explained below.

Our brain keeps an updated, functional image of our body at all times. This allows us, for example, to know where our arms are placed without actually having to look at them; and to guarantee better muscular coordination for the body. Due to sleep atonia which happens in our sleep, interestingly, even though the body image is still there, if you try to move, say, an arm, it will not move at all. But for the brain, it will be like it had moved. The brain will update the body image, believing the arm has been moved, when actually it has never left its original position. The effect of this is that we can actually "move" our body image, without really moving our physical bodies. Thanks to the highly hallucinogenic state REM sleep gets us in, the brain is then able to actually make up what it would be seeing instead of what it is actually seeing (the back of our eyelids). This is how dreams work: you are able to move your body image without actually moving your real body, and your characteristic, imaginative mind fills in the details.

While we have begun to answer the question of how we sleep, unfortunately there are still no clear answers on why we sleep. It is known that REM sleep--or dreaming sleep--is necessary for our bodies and minds to function. Rest is not a substitute for sleep. Because of this, scientists suspect that there are things the mind needs from sleep such as brain development or memory. No theory as of yet has been stood up to the rigors of scientific review, so nothing has been proven, but researchers are still hopeful.


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http://www.uchospitals.edu/news/1999...-kleitman.html


http://www.nytimes.com/2003/11/11/sc...-we-sleep.html


The next part will be on the physiology of lucid dreaming. Should have it posted by tomorrow at the latest. Thanks!

Spoiler for Minor changes v.1.0:

The Science of Sleep and Dreaming (Tentative Title) (all titles must be underlined)

Humanity has been dreaming since the beginning of our its existence. Throughout history and all the ages, mystics, shamans, witch doctors, yogis and the like have attempted to understand sleep, dreams and their meanings.

Nathaniel Kleitman was a professor physiologist who established the world's first sleep laboratory in 192552 at the University of Chicago. He and a graduate student by the name of Eugene Aserinsky can are considered by some to be the fathers of the study of sleep.

After hours of watching subjects sleep, Kleitman and Aserinsky discovered REM sleep. With further study they were able to find that REM sleep coincided with the dream state, and so the physiology of sleep and dreams was finally given its first true foundations in science.

Ever since their discovery, science has been able to uncover more about the stages of sleep and the nature of each stage.

Measuring brain activity in a sleeping person, scientists discovered that sleep consists of repetitive cycles of brain activity, during which you go through every important part of sleep. These cycles have a duration of around 90 minutes, and change slightly depending on how long you have been sleeping for.

The very first stage (N1) is not necessarily sleep, but rather a the beginning to of sleep. It is a transition from wakefulness to sleep, often referred to as somnolence. Slowly, brain activity lowers, and the brain enters the sleep process. This is the stage during which hypnic jerks occur.

The following stage (N2) is responsible for around 50% of total sleep. Muscular activity lowers and consciousness of the external environment disappears.

Stage N3 works primarily as a transition period from stage 2 to the deepest stage 4. This is the stage in which night terrors, bed-wetting, sleep-walking and sleep-talking occur.

Stage N4, together with stage N3, are considered to be what is called "deep sleep". Brain activity is the lowest, though it is lower on N4. They are considered to be essential for rest, and, together with REM (further below), will rebound in the next night if a person is deprived of them in one night of sleep. Also, trying to wake someone up during deep sleep can prove extremely difficult depending on the person.

The final stage to mention is REM, or Rapid Eye Movement sleep. It is so called because of the rapid movements of the eyes during this phase. Mental activity rises and the brain behaves similar to that of a person who is meditating. For Lucid Dreaming, this is perhaps the most important sleep phase, as it is theorized that the majority of dreams occur during REM sleep. Furthermore, some neurotransmitters in the brain, such as serotonin, are completely shut down, thus inducing what is called sleep atonia (popularly named Sleep Paralysis), during which motor functions do not work. The person is rendered physically motionless, and based on that comes a possible explanation of what dreams are.


This theory, given shape to by Dr. Stephen LaBerge, will be explained below.

Our brain keeps an updated, functional image of our body at all times. This allows us, for example, to know where our arms are placed without actually having to look at them; and to guarantee better muscular coordination for the body. Due to sleep atonia which happens in our sleep, interestingly, even though the body image is still there, if you try to move, say, an arm, it will not move at all. But for the brain, it will be like it had moved. The brain will update the body image, believing the arm has been moved, when actually it has never left its original position. The effect of this is that we can actually "move" our body image, without really moving our physical bodies. Thanks to the highly hallucinogenic state REM sleep gets us in, the brain is then able to actually make up what it would be seeing instead of what it is actually seeing (the back of our eyelids). This is how dreams work: you are able to move your body image without actually moving your real body, and your characteristic, imaginative mind fills in the details.

While we have begun to answer the question of how we sleep, unfortunately there areis still no clear answers on as to why we sleep. It is known that REM sleep--or dreaming sleep--is necessary for our bodies and minds to function. Rest is not a substitute for sleep. Because of this, scientists suspect that there are things the mind needs from sleep such as brain development or memory. No theory as of yet has been stood up to the rigors of scientific review, so nothing has been proven, but researchers are still hopeful.

I want you fancy cats to go over this in case I've missed something or you feel that the flow could be better.

I will go over this thoroughly in the next couple days.

Wah. Please don't flame me. I've expanded the text vertiginously. Also made a few correction for a better flowing style. Corrected some outdated information which was in the chapter I originally wrote, and finally, added stuff on the purpose of dreams.

Spoiler for Expansion:

The Science of Sleep and Dreaming (Tentative Title)

Humanity has been known [[better?]] dreaming since the beginning of its existence. Dreaming was believed by some cultures to be a different reality, or godly revelations by others. What else could the early man hypothesize: all that was known is that a person would sleep through a portion of the day, have wondrous experiences, in many ways similar to wakefulness, and then wake up as if nothing had happened. Throughout history and all the ages, mystics, shamans, witch doctors [[witch doctors? I wonder what Naiya meant]], yogis and the like many others have attempted to understand sleep, dreams and their meanings.

Nathaniel Kleitman was a physiologist who established the world's first sleep laboratory in 1952 at the University of Chicago. He and a graduate student by the name of Eugene Aserinsky are considered by some to be the fathers of the study of sleep modern sleep research.

After hours of watching subjects sleep, Kleitman and Aserinsky were able to find repeating patterns in sleep activity, when the sleeping subject would rapidly move his or her eyes. During this period, which Kleitman called "rapid eye movement" (REM), he observed a general increase in brain activity, and also that it was correlated with dreaming. This was the first solid step of scientific sleep research; ever since their that discovery, scientists were able to investigate the different patterns and stages of sleep to a finer degree, uncovering more about the nature of each stage.

Measuring brain activity in a sleeping person, scientists it was discovered that sleep consists of repetitive cycles of brain activity, during which you go through every important part of sleep. These cycles have. Each cycle has a duration of around 90 minutes, and changes slightly depending on how long you have been sleeping for.

The very first stage of the cycle (N1) is not necessarily yet sleep, but rather the beginning of sleep it. It is a transition from wakefulness to sleep, often referred to as somnolence. Slowly, brain activity lowers, and the brain enters the sleep process. This is the stage during which hypnic jerks occur.

The following stage of the cycle (N2) is responsible for around 50% of total sleep. Muscular activity lowers and consciousness of the external environment disappears.

[[updating my own work, scientists no longer consider N3 and N4 different:]]

Stage N3 is often called "deep sleep". Brain activity, as well as muscle tone are the lowest. This is the stage in which night terrors, bed-wetting, sleep-walking and sleep-talking occur. Trying to wake someone up during deep sleep can be extremely difficult. It is considered essential for rest, and, together with the following stage (REM), will rebound in the next night if a person is deprived of them during sleep.

The final stage to mention is REM, or Rapid Eye Movement sleep. It is so called because of the rapid movements of the eyes during this phase. Mental activity rises and the brain behaves similar to that of a person who is meditating. For Lucid Dreaming, this is perhaps the most important sleep phase, as it is theorized known that the majority of dreams occur during REM sleep. Furthermore, some neurotransmitters in the brain, such as serotonin, are completely shut down, thus inducing what is called sleep atonia (popularly named Sleep Paralysis), during which motor functions do not work. The person is rendered physically motionless, even if the brain commands the body to perform a movement. Based on that knowledge comes a possible explanation of what dreams are.

This theory about dreams is probably the most important one for our objective, which is lucid dreaming. It was given shape to by Dr. Stephen LaBerge, and will be explained below.

Our brain always keeps an updated, functional image of our body at all times. This body image, as it is called, allows us to, for example, know where our arms are placed without actually having to look at them; and to guarantee better muscular coordination for the body. However due to sleep atonia, which happens in our sleep, interestingly, even though the body image is still there, if you try to move, say, an arm, it will not move at all. But for the brain, it will be like it had moved. The brain will update the body image, believing the arm has been moved, when actually it has never left its original position. The effect of this is that we can actually "move" our body image, without really moving our physical bodies. We can walk around, jump, swim, or run, and everything will only happen inside our own head. Thanks to the highly hallucinogenic imaginative state that REM sleep gets us in, the brain is then able to actually make up what it would be seeing instead of what it is actually seeing (the back of our eyelids) taking it from our senses. This is how dreams work To make it short: you are able to move your body image without actually moving your real body, and your characteristic, imaginative mind fills in the details.

While we have begun to answer the question of how we sleep, unfortunately there is still no clear answer as to why we sleep. It is known that REM sleep--or dreaming sleep--is necessary for our bodies and minds to function. Complete sleep deprivation can kill smaller mammals such as rats.

As humans, our body follows a natural daily rhythm - the circadian rhythm. It is thought that mammals were naturally selected to have an exact daily rhythm, which would offer them multiple advantages. To name a few; better metabolic and digestive activity, sleeping during the fixed time of the day which is least dangerous (either day or night, depending on the animal), knowing how much time there is left to perform actions such as hunt or travel, among others. A piece of evidence which strongly supports this is that the bodily rhythm is known to be affected by sunlight, or also artificial light - individuals wake up from sleep when exposed to light.

Rest is not a substitute for sleep. Because of this, scientists suspect that there are specific things that sleep provides us which are fundamental. First one worth mentioning is that of neurological restoration: synthethizing more neurotransmitters and restoring sensitivity to neuroreceptors. Sleep has also been found to be fundamental for memorization and learning: humans subject to sleep deprivation have problems with memorizing new information and recalling memories. Also, humans put to sleep immediately after learning something new memorized the subject much more easily.

Sleep may also provide the body with a time to rest and heal. Continuous activation of the muscles would injure them just like overexertion would. Wound healing and immunity are also positively affected by sleep.

Children and babies require a lot of sleep to function properly (up to 18 daily hours, 8 of them being REM sleep). As humans grow older, they require each time less sleep, and the amount of REM sleep also decreases.

It has been pointed out that, if sleep were not essential, one should be able to find 1) animal species that do not sleep at all, 2) animals that do not need recovery sleep when they stay awake longer than usual, and 3) animals that suffer no serious consequences as a result of lack of sleep. Yet, no animals have been found to date that satisfy any of these criteria, which suggests that sleep is essential to the survival of complex species.

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[[I am adding some info info on dreams specifically; things I've posted here: http://www.dreamviews.com/community/...7&postcount=31 (last subtitle). I do not know how essential this is - feel free to cut it out if it doesn't fit.]]
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Up to now, we have discussed sleep, its constituition and purpose. But we have said very little about actual dreams, which are our main objective. It turns out that dreams are still a mystery to science; the multiple theories concerning dreams reveal that little is actually understood about the phenomenon. What follows are the most prominent theories about the purpose of dreaming we have so far.

One theory proposes that dreams are the natural and random activation of some neurons in the brain during REM sleep, and as a response, the forebrain creates a story to situate and rationalize the nonsensical sensory information created.

Dreams have also been found to be related to memorization and learning. Individuals have reported dreaming about newly-learned subjects or activities in the first night. Riding a bike, travelling by boat or playing tennis may very likely induce a person to dream of those activities. Some specific dreams bring forth very distant memories, and also dreams that are highly emotional are very hardly forgotten.

Sigmund Freud hypothesized that dreams are the manifestations of subconscious thoughts and experiences, and suggested that dream interpretation could be a method of analysing the subconscious mind. Dreams would then reveal a person's fears, opinions, and desires.

Eugen Tarnow suggests that dreams are excitations of the long-term memory, in order to refresh memory and avoid forgetting of useful information. Dreams would then have a directly functional purpose.

A 2001 study showed evidence that illogical locations, characters, and experiences may help the brain strengthen the linking between otherwise distant or discrepant information. Dreams would then serve as a means to consolidate memories, find similarities and correlations between memorized information.

During the night there may be many external stimuli bombarding the senses; the mind interprets the stimulus and makes it a part of a dream, such as a sound, a voice, a light. A phone ringing may make a person dream of a phone ringing, and wetting the bed may make one dream of urination. It is not known if the brain does this to ensure continued sleep, or if the phenomenon is actually unintentional. The brain will, however, awaken an individual if they are in danger or if trained to respond to certain sounds, such as a loud noise or a baby crying.

Dreams may ultimately be a means of the brain to simulate and predict scenarios, which would train such ability to be used in real situations (music does exactly the same). This would be an evolutionary advantage, such as for hunting or fighting over territory.



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Final note: I think it would be slightly better-flowing if we talked more to the reader. I think that right now it feels too formal. Perhaps it's just me though.

Sources:
http://www.uchospitals.edu/news/1999...-kleitman.html
http://www.nytimes.com/2003/11/11/sc...-we-sleep.html
http://www.camden.rutgers.edu/~bwhit...LEEP/index.htm
wikipedia - (Dream, Sleep, REM Sleep) accessed July 2009

Also, I wonder if we should do the editing on the actual thread of the chapter. This would be to avoid parallel works among the departments.

Finally, we need images for this chapter, specifically about the sleep stages.

Originally Posted by Kromoh

Finally, we need images for this chapter, specifically about the sleep stages.

What do you have in mind?

Not sure what exactly. That old graph showing the sleep stages during the night for sure (know what one?), but I can't think of what else. I don't know how far we'll be going with images, but a pic of a man sleeping and dreaming he is walking would be good to illustrate LaBerge's theory of dreams. There is also this graph showing how people that slept after learning something new memorized it better, dunno how hard it would be to find it.

Originally Posted by Anonymoose

I want you fancy cats to go over this in case I've missed something or you feel that the flow could be better.

The lab was established in 1925 according to my source, but they did not discover REM sleep until 1953 if I remember right. I'll have to go back and mention the latter date to avoid confusion. Thanks for catching that.

Originally Posted by Naiya

The lab was established in 1925 according to my source, but they did not discover REM sleep until 1953 if I remember right. I'll have to go back and mention the latter date to avoid confusion. Thanks for catching that.

Ahhh I see. Yes that did confuse me. Thanks for clearing it up.

Originally Posted by Kromoh

Wah. Please don't flame me. I've expanded the text vertiginously. Also made a few correction for a better flowing style. Corrected some outdated information which was in the chapter I originally wrote, and finally, added stuff on the purpose of dreams.

Also, I wonder if we should do the editing on the actual thread of the chapter. This would be to avoid parallel works among the departments.

Finally, we need images for this chapter, specifically about the sleep stages.

Aww! You did a great job Kromoh! Thank you so much. I will definitely put your name down with mine for this chapter since you put so much work into it.

There's another thing I have to fix in there, though, which is this:

Originally Posted by Naiya

The lab was established in 1925 according to my source, but they did not discover REM sleep until 1953 if I remember right. I'll have to go back and mention the latter date to avoid confusion. Thanks for catching that.

When that's done I'll repost it in its own thread for more editing.

Keep in mind this was the first draft and just the first part, so the rest will need editing when it's done.

Hey guys, more of Chapter 3 has been up for a while. Is there anyone willing to proofread it for me? Thanks.