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      Hitoribocchi

      Here's a little poem I wrote at about 2:30am. It's not exactly pinkcheeese, but hey...

      Those I can see, hear and touch
      Seem like strangers
      Those whose thoughts I can only read
      Seem so close, but so far away
      If only they were here, or I was there...

      My body aches, cries for rest
      But my mind clings to the place that I love best
      My little corner where I nest...
      I eat, I read, I speak, I give, I take, I share
      I feel as if I'm nowhere but everywhere

      I try to search for beautiful, long words
      But only short ones fall from my fingertips
      Perhaps simply is the best way to put it
      Must feelings always be so dressed?
      Maybe if I wasn't so stressed...
      My mind reels from contemplating regrets...

      MY body aches, cries for rest
      But my mind clings to the place that I love best
      My little corner where I nest...
      I eat, I read, I speak, I give, I take, I share
      I feel as though I'm everywhere but nowhere

      Even the small words dry up now...
      The melody of music laps over my thoughts
      I want to say more, but don't know how...
      Hitoribocchi...aloneness, lonliness, solitude...
      Perhaps in lamenting, I'm just being dramatic,
      Or perhaps even just plain rude...

      Off I go now, to a plane of isolated dreams...
      No matter where I go, it is never near enough.
      I could go on forever -- or not -- it seems
      I wonder...do I ask to be mocked by saying all this stuff?

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      Re: Hitoribocchi

      Originally posted by Rakkantekimusouka
      Here's a little poem I wrote at about 2:30am. It's not exactly pinkcheeese, but hey...
      XD
      But seriously, you're pretty good yourself there. I liked how it showed more of a free/loose thought process and the mix of "freestyle" ( I forgot what it's called...-_-; ) and the rhyming scheme of the refrain.
      Keep it up, it's really good!

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      I really enjoyed reading it

      Its a nice poem.
      "I was looking back to see if you were looking back at me to see me looking back at you".



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