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      One last poem for now

      Another World - Another Time


      A form without a name,
      Erased and withering away,
      A knot of confusion digs into memories,
      Burying my life away,
      I gotta escape this,
      In a hole of blackened lies,
      My memories won't disappear,
      Can you feel a little disappointed?
      A little emotion towards me,
      Something to hold on to,
      Something to take me away,

      This is my tragedy,
      I only feel nothing,
      Emptyness that has decayed within,
      I already feel the cuts that I haven't made,
      The dizzyness I swallowed,
      Uncovering this pain was a mistake,
      Takeing it away is fatal,
      You don't see it my way,
      I only see my ghosts around me,
      Take me away from here,
      Take me while I wait,
      I can't even dream of happiness,
      Take me to another place
      Another person,
      Another world,
      Another time.....
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      O.K. I wrote this exactly 4 min. I don't know what's in me, I just felt like writing something and I did.... Tell me what you think.


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      Wow I think you've really got talent frozen.

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      He sure as hell does, that was truly amazing.
      You guys suck.

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      Holy shit guys/gals. Thanks for the compliments. I truly didn't expect those remarks. Thanks again. maybe I'll post a few more later!


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      I especially like the ending, how it gets shorter and shorter to the end...great words..I like it <3


      Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.

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