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      A Battle of the mind!

      COEXISTANCE

      No I will not bend to your rules!
      ---Allow me to indulge today
      --- I can't, for the sake of dismay

      But the world has so much to offer!
      ---But, it is peace of mind that I seek
      ---It is all there. Take it from the week.

      For your mind is sure to eventually bend
      ---Have I not tried to walk a straight line?
      ---Yes. But take what you can while there is time.

      I suggest I take a break from you today.
      that is O.K. I am your mind. I won't go away.

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      Interesting to say the least...
      Early Morning Moment,
      A Glimpse of Joy,
      But soon it's Over, and I return to Dust...

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      Wow that was indeed intresting. I think the rhyming perfectly convinces the reader that it is a person that is talking with his/her own head. It flows nice.

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      Thankyou.

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      I thought it was great, highly creative and the rhymes blended in perfectly instead of hindering the message as a whole...
      If I hadn't made me
      I'd be more inclined to bow
      Powers that be would have swallowed me up
      But that's more than I can allow...

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      Nice! Deep and interesting...

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      Very good! Loved it!
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      yay, a poem not about love or morbidness lol ;p good stuff

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      Sweet, Good work.

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