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      Tiktok

      Tiptaptiptap
      These are the feet of my soul.
      Walking on, through fields, through mud, through shit
      My heart is light
      it's beat the blood of my soul
      But my head...
      ...that is the enemy...
      It drags me down
      tripping the feet
      The neck aching,
      merely the string of the pendulum.
      My thoughts like a lead clock
      Tikroktiktok
      I can't turn them off.
      I just sit there.
      My life an
      insignificant ember
      in an eternal night sky
      If only my head could tell me
      that it is bright...

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      Idenity X
      Hmmph . I've posted two poems and no one is yet to take any notice[/b]
      Sorry that happens when you have that kind of Idenity
      I also mistook your saying at the bottom (just a joke......) to be in conjuntion with what you wrote so I was hesitant to reply.
      Anyway, What I get out of this one is somthing that I struggle with a lot myself. My brain. But there is a lot of info that I think you could only decifer.
      So please do. I would like to know your train of thought on this one!

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      So is this poem about a lack of self esteem? That's what I get from it.

      Good job.
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      The dream is real, my friends. The failure to realize it is the only unreality.
      Adopted by Lomebririon

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      Re: Tiktok

      i thought it was awsome.....the line
      Originally posted by Identity X+--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Identity X)</div>
      Walking on, through fields, through mud, through shit [/b]
      was good, i could picture that in my head vividly.....also near the end

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      My life an *
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      that was nice as well ey, good work man

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      Thanks mate (puts on an awful impersonation of a steareotypical Ramsey Street citizen). I'll post another poem now I'm in the mood.

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