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      Poem: MONKEY

      MONKEY

      Why need you suffering to fill your sack
      You evil monkey on my back
      My pride my peace you try to steal
      Time my salve, my wounds to heal
      Infecting venom, disabled will
      Your fangs draw blood but never kill
      A pull of force, thrown to my knees
      Laughing at my desperate pleas
      One day I’ll get you in my grip
      I’ll stop your breath I’ll watch you drip
      Into a pool of melting souls
      Drown out whatever strength you stole
      Then who will keep me in the night
      No one to force my good to fight
      No bitterness to off my sweet
      I will no longer race defeat
      My world will stagnate if you I lack
      You dirty monkey…I want you back
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      kinky ;p

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      nicely done! lol. it's a very good poem. well written and Good Job.


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      WowThat really is awesome. I find myself saying that to most of the poems written in The Artist Corner - but am I to blame for there to be so much talent floating around?
      I am not sure if all who have written in The Artists Corner have had a lucid expieriance or not, but I believe it does spawn a persons awareness and if they are into the arts this would therefore spawn creativity. Maybe that is why most of the writings are so damn good.

      More coming from you Frozenjoth?

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      Could be Howetzer. Could be.

      Great job on the poem. I was kind of suprised actually and thrown off by the name of the piece to it's actual contents.

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      Thank you people! It was just a quicky but fun to do.
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      Originally posted by Zapheera
      Thank you people! It was just a quicky but fun to do.
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      \"why do we dream when our thoughts mean nothing? ...I need serenity!!\"
      Quickies are always the best

      That's so odd you put that part of God smack's song down because I was just going to post somthing on that and another song.

      Why do we dream when our thoughts mean nothing and when will we learn to control ?
      To me that sounds like someone who has not been introduced to lucid dreaming no?

      Also Fionna apple's song - "Iv'e got my feet on the ground & I don't go to sleep to dream. You got your head in the clouds & your not at all what you seem"
      Is this song bashing Ld's?????

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      To me that sounds like someone who has not been introduced to lucid dreaming no?[/b]
      I don't know Howetzer...but do you want to get married? LOL Tell Jade she better watch her Daddy!... But seriously, you sound like someone I would have alot in common with.
      Cool that you took notice of my song quote. I'm not familiar with the Fionna Apple song but she's probably just jealous. I feel that it is better to let go of control of life. In fact i'ts just a loosing game to even try to control one's life. Of course we need to plan and make decisions and all, but I've learned that when things don't go my way it is easier to just roll with it and see where it leads.I am the type of person who would never consult a psychic because I would want to ruin my adventure.
      But I love the thought of having control in dreamland because this is where anything really can happen and nobody has to get hurt in the process! Furthermore, I don't really care who is for or against lucid dreaming. It's kind of personal to me and I don't mind sharing it with fellow "dreamers" but am not about to argue it's value to the skeptics. Their loss!
      Fare Thee Well!
      Z
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      Zapheera I did try and adopt you but was a step behind.
      That what you say is so true. Your thoughts and your mind, as well as Lucid dreaming are yours to keep and no one can take that from you. (Not yet a least)
      As far as songs go check out this topic http://dreamviews.com/forum/viewtopic.php?...silent+lucidity

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      Nice Man keep up the good work
      Fear of Death is a Shorcut to Thinking...

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      I thought that was really terrific. I loved the way you were able to make it rhyme without making the content suffer, but rather enhancing it...

      Favorite quote from it:
      Infecting venom, disabled will
      Your fangs draw blood but never kill [/b]
      This part is just perfect, completely and utterly perfect...
      If I hadn't made me
      I'd be more inclined to bow
      Powers that be would have swallowed me up
      But that's more than I can allow...

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      yeah that part rocked good job
      I wuv-Scwigglie

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