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      POEM-Farewell Love

      Farewell Love


      Please donít call out my name
      It no longer belongs on your tongue
      Loveís a game, a risk , itís a chance that you take
      You can gamble the oddsÖfew have won


      My moans and my whispers were once for your ears
      As my lips once belonged on your skin
      To continue now is no less than a lie
      With no feeling loves only a sin

      Iím prepared to reach out in the darkness
      To a lover thatís no longer there
      Itís not that you suddenly mean nothing
      Itís just that I no longer care

      I didnít know in the end I would shatter your heart
      But these words that I write they are true
      We never meet with a planned intent to depart
      Iím sorry, farewell , I donít love you
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      Zapheera That was a very well written poem. However I feel as though you wrote it from expeiriance. (which I hope I am wrong) But the Poem seems so sincere it saddens me.

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      I like it. it's very well written. It does sound something of experience. I printed this out. i hope you dont mind.


      Are we dreaming?

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      nice...
      [22:59] <Kaniaz> You basically did a massive shit on the rug of this IRC
      [22:59] <Kaniaz> And called it a message

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      ahh yes, I missed the existentialism of this forum.

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      Yeah... reminds me of my past seven girlfriends...

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      Thank you guys! Yes the poem does reflect reality. I just broke up with my boyfriend Sunday night. Life goes on, well at least for me it does!
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      nice poem.


      Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.

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      Harsh reality, great poem.
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      The dream is real, my friends. The failure to realize it is the only unreality.
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      The Poem is really great and it lets the reader sympathize perfectly with what you are going through. It is, as it has been said before, majectically written and seeing your work I realize you are truly very talented and versed...

      Also, I forgot, How you doin'...(anyone who can write this well and with such emotions deserves my attention )
      If I hadn't made me
      I'd be more inclined to bow
      Powers that be would have swallowed me up
      But that's more than I can allow...

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      Thank You Truthbearer! You can be the president of my fan club any day. However I must admitt that your kind words will impose pressure for me with any fothcoming material. But if it is in the stars...I shall overcome!
      By the way...I'm doing fine! Say, do you write poetry?
      " my dreams they aren't as empty as my conscience seems to be"


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      I generally like to write songs, but since I don't play any instruments, thus they don't have music to them, I guess you can consider them poems with a rhythm....

      One of them is here, called Going Away, the others I haven't gotten around to post them yet, but plan on doing so soon....
      If I hadn't made me
      I'd be more inclined to bow
      Powers that be would have swallowed me up
      But that's more than I can allow...

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