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      She loves me so....(Poem)

      [u][b]SHE LOVES ME SO....


      She loves me so much she showed me my heart,
      Set alone she tore it apart,
      Painted black and filled with sin,
      Put back together I sold myself within,
      She loves me so much I said she was true,
      No one could understand, not even you,
      I kept her tears away from the air,
      In a safe place but why should you care?
      She loves me so much she showed me how to cry,
      Now I love her so much I'll show here how to die,

      And this how I died, with my wrists split wide open,
      And this is how I tried, thinking with the blood soaked in,
      And this where I hide, A place inside my mind,
      And this where I bind, My soul away from your kind,

      She loves me so much I was taught to cry,
      She loves me so much she told me how to die,
      No more stars to stare at tonite,
      My Angel's gone and I can't get things right,
      One thought, One action can cease all my pain,
      I brought myself into this willing to be cast in the rain,
      Visions of you surround me as I lay in serenity,
      Would you do anything for eternal tranquility?

      And this is how I died, With my heart split wide open,
      And this how I tried, To let all the blood soak in,
      And this where I hide,To keep my thoughts inline,
      And this is where I bind, My soul away from your kind,

      You made me cry,
      I will make you die,
      Eraseing you, out of my mind.

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      I haven't been around in a while so i figured I would start back by posting a poem. I hope you like it, just be honest and tell me what you think.


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      Amazing!

      You most definantly have a way with words man, that poem blew me away... loves a funny things... when your getting it, its amazing, but if your ever brave enough to give it.... thats when it hurts, couse when you give somone a such a significant piece of youself... she can either nurture and love it back.... or she can distroy it and couse pain so emmence that nothing else could even compare...

      Ur deep man Keep it comin!

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      That is truly a magical poem man!

      I really enjoyed reading it, some really interesting themes in that poem that I totally relate to.

      Its a good poem because when you read it you imbed your own personal experiences towards what you are saying and project it towards yourself. (extremely well written).
      "I was looking back to see if you were looking back at me to see me looking back at you".



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      i really liked it, and i think you're right, it's easy in theory to give yourself for someone, but when you really want to, it is very difficult.
      it's harder to say i love you to someone when you truly mean it.
      Great poem!
      sounds like it was quite a tragic love affair...maybe you feel you gave too much?
      'all of the moments that already passed/
      try to go back and make them last.'

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      Frozen_joth, Wow it was brilliant. It touched me deeply and I really connect with the picture you have painted with word.

      You have a great talent to show a painful experience with a soft beauty. The opening line draws you in with a romantic notion only to be shown the possible realities that come from opening up your heart to another.

      "And this is how I died, With my heart split wide open, - it is also how you are reborn huh?

      Romantic love - emotional pain is so much more intense for me than any physical pain I have ever experienced. Just to put that into context one experience is falling from a building 2.5 stories high to have my head cracked open by a telephone box, hahaha. Young, dumb and drunk.....very lucky to be alive. Ive never felt physical pain like my heart and soul have felt pain.

      Anyway I would love to read more of your work. I'm always to shy to post some of mine but maybe one day.....

      Peace Sensi.
      "One good thing about music, when it hits you, you feel no pain.
      Hit me with music now, oh now, hit me with music, harder, brutalize me". Bob Marley.

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      Wow...that was amazing.
      I don't even know what to say, keep it up!

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      Hey thanks for the compliments. This is actually kinda old. Someone had to dig this one up. I think this was the last poem I posted in here. After reading the comments it makes me wanna post some more. I wrote this one after a 5 yr relationship ended. After I wrote this I felt better. I was almost completly over it. Love is a weird emotion. thanks again for the comments. I'll be posting another one up soon.


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