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      Some Poetry

      I decided to make a thread with all my poetry.


      ~~~~~ Garbled Endings ~~~~~
      Death awaits, the executing sentence
      Watching cautiously, every motion and sense
      Ruffled conviction, with potty poise
      Jocund life, despite my eccentric joys
      Arriving in awry juncture, darkness precipitates
      Daunting my sagacity, arising concern, straits

      Hallucinated, death detracts my garbled existence
      Slowly devising ones fascinated romance
      Paths look inanimate, as spirits cry for aid
      Life surpasses in a second, all begins to fade
      One may not even begin to reckon, as the end closes
      There your body lies, with nothing more, but a bed of roses


      ~~~~~ Bliss ~~~~~
      Cold, in need of Bliss
      Rainfall, descends no more
      My heart aches, something new

      For someone to hold, and kiss
      Painful tears, happiness no more
      I have died, dismissing all of you

      Forgotten, merely repleted in Bliss
      Rain shall fall, I abhor no more
      Soon enough, I have faded, adieu

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      This one is way different than the others, but just like them,
      it shares the similarity of anger and pain:


      ~~~~~ Letting It Go ~~~~~
      It's time I moved ahead,
      Leave it behind; let it go.
      Too much heartache, like she had said,
      It came over me, so I'll let it go.
      Something new, refreshingly new,
      So I can, let it all go.
      I tried, and tried, but never knew,
      It was hard to let it, let it all go.

      I'll force myself; I know I can try,
      To let it go.
      I can do it, even if I die,
      I will one day let this all go.
      Do I really want to?
      Let this all go?
      Fly past me, on a whim?
      Is it that easy, can I really let him go, or forget him?

      Should I do this?
      Let it all go?
      Maybe I will, for the sake of them,
      And see it all quickly; quickly just go.
      It won't haunt me anymore,
      Once I let this all go.
      I'll laugh in the years to come,
      That I simply couldn't, just let him go.

      Nothing will matter,
      So, I guess it's my time.
      My time to just do it,
      I'm letting this go.
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      The rest of these are really old, and they are in a different style of writing:


      ~~~~~ Black, White, Gray ~~~~~
      Black, white, and gray
      Black and white i see all around
      I try to give back with a fight
      Nothing i do seems to work and i feel as if im going to drown.
      Gray is the world around me today
      But i remain curled in the corner filled with color...
      I feel like a foreigner, confused with only the colors of:
      Black, white, and gray.
      And soon my eyes will only see red for the rest of the day.


      ~~~~~ Awkward ~~~~~
      How awkward i feel and as if i could not seal myself from you.
      You seem to understand, and are always ready to lend me a helping hand.
      Yet my mind cannot get rid of you... is it true?
      Have i fallen madly in love with you?
      I yelp to see if you can help me...
      Will you help me get over you?
      No wait, moreover to also understand thee?


      ~~~~~ Envy ~~~~~
      Envious I walk about the street.
      There it is again, oh how sweet,
      they sit and laugh; they run and play.
      What I would give to do that someday.
      Sadness sweeps throughout my body,
      making me have thoughts of absentness.
      I weep and still dream to have such a love that deep.
      As I sleep he comes,
      the one that my heart loves,
      but still he's as distant as the sound of the drums that come from my heart.
      I feel as if we will forever remain apart;
      but there one day, life will cease and never more persist to be gray.
      He will become a piece of me, and we will be together forever.


      ~~~~~ Forwarding Time ~~~~~
      What would happen if i could go into the future...
      Would you then love me?
      What would happen if i did go into the future...
      Would we be more than friends?
      What would you do if you could go into the future?
      Did anything we say matter, or would our friendships shatter?
      Would you go into the future, so should i? hehehe
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      Well, no one seems to be replying, so i guess i'll post some more.

      ~~~~~ Vitality Engrossed ~~~~~
      Winter breeze, arousing my soul
      Crystals freeze, retracting the sun
      Wilting roses, fail to bloom
      Life blurs, withal nothing consumes
      Apollo concieves, shimmers of hope
      My heart perceives, naught for goodness' sake

      Desolate I lay, in wait for cacoethes
      Nor will it convey, vitality engrossed
      Naif of my milieu, besot am i of both
      The happiness they posses, and my insistent oath
      In short i will relay, ceasing not to sin
      Despite my passionate display, evermore my heart shall anticipate


      ~~~~~ Fear ~~~~~
      Broken, nevertheless your love is sustaining
      Mending from it, however my life is draining
      Who are you, what have you done, where have you gone?
      Life seems to have changed you, and your song
      You have changed, just like your many different faces
      Nothing is the same, just like your different embraces

      My eyes, they fill with tears
      For all I can do is deny my fears
      I shall pray for you, maybe then
      I can see that sweet, sweet face again
      Yes, I'll admit it despite my pride, I'm scared for you
      But I don't matter, nothing does, only your happiness and what you do


      ~~~~~ Strive ~~~~~
      Nothing essential has come from this
      My design is of no potential , simply of reminisce
      Engulfed by emotions to strong for me
      Enstranged by notions, I'd rather not agree

      Pity not my wretched soul's suplications
      Envy me not for dead am I, as well as I strive for my dedications
      My life in a simple way, is filled with nothing but anguish
      My love is as simple, to never betray, despite it all, and my hearts constant wish


      ~~~~~ Rebirth ~~~~~
      New world, as darkness descends
      Clearing a new start, she tries not to pretend
      Nothing can be forgotten, but refrained from
      Distance renewed, as his rejections become
      Ignored, sunrise awakens - refreshing her spirits
      Giddy, dancing in blue circles - she never submits

      Black-hearted, insearch for rebirth
      Insitant for him, knowing what it's all worth
      Looking away, she cannot bare it any longer
      Resolving her fears, mirth allows no stir
      In reminisce, she cries still - her bitterness will be dissolved
      Her love, her old life - will forever reamin unsolved

      ~~~~~ Candy ~~~~~
      Sweetness fails, nonetheless she continues
      Copious ambitions, arduous adiues
      There he stands, insensate with a brandy
      Pale in disgust, she puts down her candy
      Rushing in departure, to her homely chateau
      She finds comfort, and soon enough another beau

      Emotions are little, evidently elegant
      Loveless flavour, cueing of his levant
      Life goes on, with little reminders of his fragrance
      Energetic, the given memory does, further feeding the romance
      Desireable, the thought so sweet -of once more to meet
      Then, could she face him once again - brandy in hand, complete

      ~~~~~ Bewitched ~~~~~
      Mist decending the woodlands, as I run past its creeks
      The bon fires, and Samhain has started, despite my benightedness
      Exiled from society and ignored by companions, Ive counted for weeks
      I think it is time, regardless of their thoughts, tis time I confess
      My body, and soul, has all been transformed - me think Ive been bewitched

      For the better you see, I now have powers, I am now enriched!
      Surely I am not, under a love spell, for never would I have the power to tell
      But if you join me, next time I leave, we shall go for Yule or Ostara
      We will have our chance, in celebration, to see him emerge from HELL!
      Dancing with lust, we shall drink until the sun, for then we shall soon withdraw


      ~~~~~ Untouchable ~~~~~
      Untouchable, as feelings go through
      Unthinkable, as thoughts remain
      Unbelievable, can it be anymore true?
      Unchangeable, can you forever refrain?
      Unreliable, you deserve no thank you!
      My heart's confused, for you are vain!

      Inappreciable, you think you are
      Inconceivable, you are more to me
      Indescribable, for to me you are a star!
      Inescapable, for my thoughts consist of thee!
      Inseparable, nay we shall forever remain afar?
      My mind's submitting, but will you never agree?
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      I really like your poetry Keavy. You seem a bit sad though. I really like Vitality Engrossed by the way.

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      Not bad. Nothing too special about them that makes the poetry stand out. Most of your rhyming schemes consist of AABB or ABAB, or none at all. The dominating mood is dark, depression, hopelessness, unrequited love... not necessarily a bad thing, but change it up a bit. It all seems like a mix of the same stuff.

      Keep working at it.

      (Oh, and don't expect a lot of replies on poetry threads, it just doesn't happen)


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      ~~~~~ Muse ~~~~~
      Speechlessly my mind wanders to the depths of the unknown.
      For neither in hell nor mysterious eternity can such be beheld.
      To cause me to produce such raptures and yet remain,
      So that my essence fears for the potential unwinding of its core.

      Breathless, my heart quakes.
      Never did I believe to find such a redeeming muse,
      Whom suffered from melancholy love pooled with overflowing ecstasies.

      Content, tears trickle down.
      As our sunrise embraces produce in me eloquent happiness,
      Nurturing distraught passions which blind my eyes to the setting sun.

      Never-ending felicity, grant me strength to regain it so!
      Enlighten this eccentricity, for life has thus confounded me.

      Woe, my soul wakes.
      Effortless to question if this is merely a crafty little ruse,
      Clearly ensnaring all to be fooled with such simple jubilees.

      Ardent, those eyes express.
      Evidently not the eyes of one that would seduce or torment,
      For doubtless those great actions can only come from the wise.

      Abounding disbelief, I have discovered a muse thus faithful!
      And yet I know not, whether I should disregard such feelings so joyful.

      I beg you to tempt me with trails so cruel and ghastly.
      So that I may see whether or not my follies detract your steadfast nature.
      Whereas my mind yearns to discern if I should allow,
      Such a creature to forever hearten the passions of my being.

      Whether my muse shall show compassion, Life will neatly bestow.
      I end in such a fashion, taking heart to fate unknown.
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