my poems constructive critisism plz!
The way
The air was flying in the plane but the plane was flying in the passengers,
the sky was upsidedown riding purple horses happily,
the little midget on my doorstep was eating a chipunks hair,
while to moon wasn't there.
How could it?
white is not black but black just might be white,
the ground is slippery but not as much as my fist on a brick wall,
if you look closley at a bird you will see albert einstein,
a screwdriver can open your eyes to the whole world!
People are forgetfull
the earth was shaking,
the money makers were money making,
the optimistics were pestimistic,
i forgot to take a shower this morning.
History lesson
when the ground rumbles it is a mystery,
when a homless man takes a shit on your lawn now that is a mystery,
when you trip on a turtle and puncture your knee cap thats a mystery,
if all of the above has happend to you then you have made history.
