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      A piece of writing, by Myrek.

      Vampires in the night

      A soulless one in the dress of a fine gentleman walks the streets of London at night undaunted by the freezing winds. He passes through the streets lined with upper class houses but suddenly he stops in front of one house to gaze in the window. The hall is brightly lit and dozens of both young and older couples dancing about to a lively tune that drifts out to him. Many people of all ages are standing around the dance floor chatting and conversing with vigor as the songs go on and on. The wanderer is suddenly startled by a young couple bursting out of the front door and into a carriage that had just pulled up. They hop inside quickly but before the servant closes the carriage door he observes the girl holding closely to the man as he arranges blankets over their laps. As he watches the carriage roll away a single tear runs down his cheek as he remembers the long centuries of solitude he has lived alone since his one love was taken from him by her own mortality. The strong sense of loss and hatred consumes him as the now frozen tear on his cheek cracks from the frost that has engulfed it and turns into dust that is swept away by the brisk winter winds.


      I wrote this a couple days ago, hope you all enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it =).

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      good shit, needs more.
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      it's excellent. indeed, it needs more. kindof leaves you hanging there. which sucks because it's really good now write some more pls >:l +crackwhip+


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      Seems like it has potential to become a story, and could be rather interesting, depending on how you make it. So far it seems like some vampire guy had a wife, or girlfriend, or just someone he loved, who died, because they were human.

      So it seems like you really are left hanging, pretty much. It'd be neat to see a story that had a vampire, who wasn't evil and diabolic.

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      COME ON PEOPLE CAN'T YOU RECONIZE PURE GENIOUS WRITING WHEN YOU SEE IT WHERE'S THE COMMENTS/CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISISM/LOVE ETC. D:



      SNAP SNAP.


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      it's good and has alot of potential. Don't make the same mistake as everyone else by losing interest in it though... Alot of people get bored with their passions and start over and over again until they realize they are just getting no where and give up. If you are into creative writing, it would be great to discuss stuff on the subject with you.
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      nice yeah you should continue it.

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      Well it has the paperdoll seal of approval so its like platinum. Thats some great writing man, you should check out squalls role play site we could really use you there. Pm him about it, this is some great writing.
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      Makes me think of how I posted about my story, and no one ever said anything about it.

      Although it's now finished, and about 48 pages long, that probably discourages people from it

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