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    1. 08-26-2004 12:09 AM #1
      Feyd_Shadowen
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      poetry. tell me what you think. ill post darker stuff later

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      When the fires subdue
      And the vision returns
      I see white first
      The white of your outspread wings
      Then your figure comes into focus
      Beautiful is far to undescriptive
      The sound of a solo piano
      Playing softly, painfully, slowly
      Key by key you watch me shift
      Uncomfortably subtle
      A quiet step forward
      A faint patter
      Such a low audibility
      Crescendo sway
      What can be used to etch the words...
      The piano melody?
      The whisper of your breath?
      The meandering wind?
      Or the silence that escapes my throat?
      Awe is me; loving are thee
      Cold hands envelope the sea
      The lilac sky accents your eyes
      For they blink slowly
      Taking in everything
      A slow ticking moment at a time
      Should I speak?
      Can I speak?
      It is useless
      You know what I would say
      I reach for your hand but my perception is off
      I try again this time succeed
      It is there and then
      I knew it was you
      I found the one
      My one and only someone

      ††C.Laskey II††
      8.25.04
      When you look in the mirror, tell me what do you see?
      Your self or some one you want to be?
      ††Feyd††
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    2. 08-26-2004 09:24 PM #2
      Feyd_Shadowen
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      Hey?

      Come on people I am looking for feed back... What is so hard about just letting me know if you like it or not....
      When you look in the mirror, tell me what do you see?
      Your self or some one you want to be?
      ††Feyd††
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    3. 08-26-2004 09:33 PM #3
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      dont know about anywone else but i like it. am i right in assuming its an expression of finding love when you see it to be attempting to elude you?
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