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      Smile La Mariposa

      I follow you,
      up into the mountain forest.
      Where the sunlight,
      from the setting sun,
      illuminates the ephemeral cherry blossoms.
      Your glittering wings,
      flutter gracefully on the soft autumn breeze,
      and sparkle in the ethereal, amber light.

      I remember us;
      Embracing by the fountain
      in the centre of town.
      It is approaching sunset,
      and the street life is dying.
      We sit there gazing into the crystal water.
      Te quiero.” Your suddenly whisper,
      softly in my ear.
      I smile.
      Le amo a.” I whisper back.
      Slowly we begin to kiss.
      The roughness of the rock beneath us;
      the harsh roars of passing cars;
      the fading golden light –
      none of it seemed to matter.
      Time was only measured
      in your heart beating against mine.

      I wipe away a tear,
      The vividness of the memory,
      aches my heart.
      Your flutter deeper into the dense forest.
      I chase after you,
      but the encroaching dark,
      shrouds you from my eyes.

      I remember that night;
      the miserable rain,
      hammering down upon the rough road.
      You and I were running,
      trying to find shelter.
      Then a blaze of white
      illuminated everything.
      Then a roar –
      oh a loud roar –
      exploded in our ears.
      Then I felt you warm hands,
      Pull me close – as if for the last time –
      and then push me to the side.



      My hands scream
      As they strike the ground.
      The sound came suddenly.
      The sickening sound of something breaking,
      then being smacked against the ground.
      Silence.
      I turn around to find you lying there,
      your clothes are stained crimson.
      "¡Socorro!” I scream.
      I run up and down the dark, deserted road.
      "¡Socorro!” I scream again, "¡Hubo un accidente!
      You continue to lie there
      not moving.

      Tears are pouring down my cheeks,
      as I remember you there
      - so vulnerable.
      I race after you,
      through the forest.
      "¡Espere!” I cry, "¡Espéreme!"
      A strong southerly wind,
      shakes the overhead branches.
      Cherry blossom petals,
      soaked from a previous day’s rain,
      shimmer as they fall like snow to the ground.
      I call out to you again,
      but you just continue.

      Your shining wings,
      sear a rift in the surrounding darkness,
      illuminating a gravestone
      - your gravestone.

      I fall to my knees,
      my soul cracks open.
      The grief I kept laden in my heart,
      rushes out like the outgoing tide.
      My hands pummel the dirt,
      my scream fills the dark.

      Those final days,
      come rushing back,
      with as much force as a tidal wave.

      I remember waiting,
      the silent waiting in the emergency room.
      Every tick of the overhead clock,
      like a fire of a gun.
      My heart feels ready to burst.
      I can’t stop shaking.
      I feel like a leaf
      caught in a wind,
      unable to control itself
      let alone anything around it.
      After painful ages,
      a macabre doctor appears.
      His eyes looked empty,
      his face ashen.
      My soul sank,
      my heart stood still.
      I stand up,
      waiting expectantly for his verdict.
      Siento.” He mumbles to the floor.
      "¡No!” My cry resounds throughout the hall
      as I crash to the floor.
      My tears, everyone an ounce of my soul
      falls through time and space
      before crashing to the ground.

      Your funeral I’ll never forget.
      I stood by your coffin the whole procession.
      The white oak,
      looked so rough and uncomfortable.
      I was certain you couldn’t have enjoyed
      being in there.
      Your face however,
      looked more peaceful than I had ever seen it.
      The light from the sunset,
      shone gently on you -
      as if caressing you –
      giving you an angelic quality.
      I felt like shaking you,
      and yelling, "¿Por qué?
      over and over till my lungs burst.
      I felt like hitting you,
      we still had our whole lives to live together,
      how dare you leave me here all alone!
      Mourners came and went,
      but I stayed by your side.
      I placed red and white roses
      on your coffin as they lowered you.
      I fled unable to stand anymore.

      Later that day,
      I found myself at the lake,
      you and I had swam in,
      Earlier that summer.
      The setting sun rays,
      were dancing
      On the lake’s calm surface when we were there.
      As we lay on its banks
      the light shone on your dark hair,
      And it brightened your smile.
      I casually asked you,
      if you were reincarnated,
      What would you come back as.
      Your turned to me and grinned,
      Una mariposa.” you replied.

      Sitting in front of your grave now,
      I was jarred from my memories
      back to reality.
      Una mariposa?
      I glanced at you,
      as fluttered up into
      The strengthening dawn,
      too far for my outstretched hand.
      Una mariposa…


      Vocabulary

      “La mariposa”/ “Una mariposa” - “The Butterfly”/ “A butterfly”
      “Te quiero.” - “I love you.”
      “Le amo a.” - “I love you to.”
      “¡Socorro!” - “Help!”
      “¡Hubo un accidente!” - “There has been an accident!”
      “¡Espere!” - “Wait!”
      “¡Espéreme!” - “Wait for me!”
      “Siento.” - “I’m sorry
      “¡No!” - “No!”
      “¿Por qué?” - “Why?”



      Last edited by Subaru; 09-04-2008 at 01:28 PM.

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      Te quiero would technically be I want you, but beautiful poem nonetheless.


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      Unhappy Thanks

      Thanks! xoxoxo

      I intially wrote it after my best friend stopped seeing me.

      We were best friends and spent every day together and then boom, he left. Not even a see ya!!


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      Makes you kind of wonder what happened: was the sudden disappearance intentional, or is he too regretting the no goodbye? Regardless, I feel for you, it really sucks to lose someone.

      One thing I like about your poem is it's flawless form, I didn't spot one grammatical, punctual or spelling error in it (not that I actually search through poems looking for mistakes). Though I am not the biggest fan of linear pieces, this one very much appealed to me. Well done.


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      No Mistakes

      Well I actually spent an hour going over it making sure no mistakes were in it. I guess I just needed to get down how I felt, and I didn't want anything to ruin that, not even silly writing mistakes.
      Thanks by the way. Your the only person that's really show me consideration and sympathy in a really long time.

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      I'm naturally empathetic.

      Additionally, do you actually know spanish or did you run it through a translator? There are some other discrepencies I've noticed that a translator would very much be accredited to committing.


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      Spanish.

      Okay you caught me, I used a translator. I'd love to learn the language though, I think it's beautiful.

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      It would be 'Le amo tambien,' because the 'a' means to, not too, as in going to a place, person or thing.

      And it would be 'lo siento,' instead of just siento. Siento means I feel.


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      Question Hispanic

      Hey, I was just curious are you hispanic because you know a lot about the Spanish language?

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      Nope, anything but hispanic. I just absorbed the information from Spanish class even when I wasn't paying attention. You know how some people have the knack for languages? That's me.


      Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
      Look out on a summers day,
      with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.


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      Smile lol

      Cool, I'm kinda like that in my French class. Well...I used to be.
      I'm in sixth year now and no longer taking it. I think I've forgotten everything but Bonjour

      Oh! I've created a new thread called "The Fallen Petals of Subaru - A Poetry Collection" where I'm going to post my poetry etc. from now on. Plus, I corrected some of the mistakes you pointed out to me in "La Mariposa".


      (I only added this smiley because I thought it looked cute! )

      Last edited by Subaru; 09-09-2008 at 06:05 PM.

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