Thread: PillowHead- Short film about lucid dreaming.

pretty good man, I enjoyed that and can tell you worked hard on this. keep on making videos and experimenting with creativity. a few positive/negative points...

- it was pretty slow. it seemed like it kept reintroducing itself a million times until pillowhead was actually solidified as the main character at around 3:45.
- The frequent cuts were irritating at worst and confusing at best, not too sure what you were trying to convey (microsleeps?)
+ the art direction is rather nice, the color adjustment painted a surreal mood onto the film. unfortunately it wasnt consistent, some shots had heavy matting and others had nothing at all
+ Good visual effects in indie movies are always a pleasant surprise
- I'd work on pacing and flow, I frequently found myself confused as to what exactly is occuring in the movie
- the ending seemed to come out of nowhere, as it didnt really seem like he lived a terribly shitty life throughout the movie. Perhaps you could have portrayed a more negative view towards reality?

overall, it was an ambitious piece, albeit hard to follow (confusion in movies is only successful in small doses). keep making movies, man!

He has a funny voice, I could not understand half of the movie. I felt narcoleptic while watching.

But yeah, other then that it came together pretty well, though I think it may have been more powerful if the pace was picked up a bit. Good job.

Thanks for the crititsism MSG, the overall pace of the film was something that wasnt that obvious to me after hours of editing so thanks for pointing that out, although im not completely sure what i could have done to speed it up a little, perhaps some of the reality scenes could have been a bit more extreme, for instance getting beaten up by a group of kids, some hard drug taking?
I don't know, oh well, im not too unhappy with it, but it's all one big learning curve i suppose.
thanks