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      "Yellow"

      Yellow shows it's face in the sky
      The blues fade to purples
      and a sweet sweet sound fills the air,
      as day welcomes the night.

      Yellow streams with shoots that fly
      The blue boy burgles
      hearts stolen with his sweet sweet flair,
      as day welcomes the night.

      With sound and sense the boy reaches boldly
      To the unfamiliar windowsil
      Yellows and purples dance with new reds.
      The blue boy coos, "Daddy, I love you."
      and that sweet sweet sound filled the air,
      as day welcomed the night.

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      Yellow and Purple are my two favourate colours would like to see more to this poem, its a good beggining! does it contain more?
      "I was looking back to see if you were looking back at me to see me looking back at you".



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      It's a sonnet... so it's supposed to have 14 lines. I'll try writing a follow up sonnet or two and see what I come up with.

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      *decides not to go into the mechanics of a sonnet*

      "If there was one thing the lucid dreaming ninja writer could not stand, it was used car salesmen."

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      Originally posted by Amethyst Star
      *decides not to go into the mechanics of a sonnet*
      Mind if I ask why?

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      Originally posted by Mickeys_Elbow+--><div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(Mickeys_Elbow)</div>
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      *decides not to go into the mechanics of a sonnet*
      Mind if I ask why? [/b]
      Big mistake. She just spared you a very long lecture, so accept the offer with gratitude.

      Nice sonnet, though im not to savvy with the mechanics of music.

      EDIT: forgot my ass

      take that CT!

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      Oh come on! Tell me! Is there something about sonnets that I need to know?

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