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      Nadia's Feathers (A story)

      [[Here's the simplicity of it all, I will post this story here. If you like it, I'll continue posting more. This is not my
      first attempt of writing a story but it is the first time I am posting one on here. So, here we go! ]]


      The crackling sounds of tree branches snapping, awoke Nadia, from her slumber. She never once opened her eyes to the creeping of footsteps approaching her. Her heart was pounding as she listened the echo’s of the night slowly diminish to only the sound of crickets and owls. She swallowed hard, not moving from where she lay. Nadia had to calm herself down with the inquisitive thoughts that kept racing through her mind. A bold move of hers would have involved her to run but she knew better that. More people die that way. She silently told herself. Her breath escaped her as she came to realize she had not been breathing.

      Finally, her leg twitched from not being able to move for so long. She noted the crunching sounds of dead leaves underneath her boots. Another realization
      hit her, “I’m surrounded by trees.” She uttered so softy to herself that it would have been unnoticeable to anyone who were not an earshot away from her.
      She took one final breath before she let her eyes flutter open. Her eyes took merely a few seconds to adjust to the darkness that enshrouded her. Her thoughts moving faster than her eyes would allow her to, she moved her head to where she had heard the footsteps, and then she spat out the bits of leaves and hair from her mouth to better inspect on yond farther. Her furrow scrunched as she squint her eyes but could not see anything. Her head shot up to a different direction from the howling of a coyote, in a not so far away distance.

      Nadia lazily dragged her legs towards her and sat up, a moment of a dizziness spell struck her. She placed both her hands on each side of her face, the
      pain throbbing in her head like a jackhammer to cement; but beyond the best wishes of what her body wanted she forced herself to stand. She dusted
      herself off, looking at the rip on her pant leg of her blue jeans. A frown shown on her face but soon after disappeared as she used the blade off her finger
      to feel in the hole of her jeans if she were injured. She winced at the alarming pain that shot through her leg. Her index finger moved along the grooves
      of the wound on her calf,to feel how deep the gouge was, ignoring the pain to what was sent to her brain.

      The clouds peeled away briefly, like skin on an orange, and moonlight shined down to reveal the blood that was soaked into her jeans. Her eyes shot down
      to the ground at the dried blood on the leaves and grass from where she once lay. Her tongue clicked in disgust as she thought it was going to be a lot
      tougher to get out of where she was at back to civilization. From the sound of things, she knew she was in the thick of the woods. More shocking to her is
      that the coyote had stopped howling. The rustling of trees began and then birds had taken flight. To her, it was not a good sign and she spoke too soon as
      she heard growling amidst the bush that was behind her. She dared not look for she already had an idea that it was her little furry friend stopping by to grab
      itself a meal.

      “This could prove to be mighty interesting.” She spoke to herself more than to the coyote.
      Last edited by Vira; 02-12-2010 at 08:44 PM.
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      I like it, Vira. There are some odd wordings and sentence structure problems, but nothing a bit of editing wouldn't iron out. I'm wondering what will happen next. Wondering what the title refers to.

      I want more.

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      Excellent stuff! I'm sure there's room for improvement, but what writer doesn't have that? I'd love to see more!

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      Moar plex :3.

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      I haven't forgotten about this but I've just haven't had
      any inspiration to continue it. Instead, I'll go over more
      of what I written so far to improve it. Then later I will
      post additional paragraphs in the first post so try to
      watch out for updates.

      “If only I was equipped with the capacity to
      utilize my brain for witty quips.”



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      Quote Originally Posted by Vira View Post
      I haven't forgotten about this but I've just haven't had
      any inspiration to continue it. Instead, I'll go over more
      of what I written so far to improve it. Then later I will
      post additional paragraphs in the first post so
      try to
      watch out for updates.

      ^That, except for what I crossed out. I plan to
      update it as soon as possible.
      “If only I was equipped with the capacity to
      utilize my brain for witty quips.”



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      Well? Where is it, Dearheart?

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      Quote Originally Posted by Man of Steel View Post
      Well? Where is it, Dearheart?
      Kind of hard to do that when I'm miles away from my
      computer that has the story saved on it and shortly
      regretting for not bringing it if I had of known I would
      of been able to access the internet up here.
      “If only I was equipped with the capacity to
      utilize my brain for witty quips.”



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      Alright to all you hopeless/hopeful romantic, this story is for you: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2824040/1/Street_Romance

      Oh and for the rest of you that like this story: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2824049/1/Nadias_Feathers
      Last edited by Vira; 07-02-2010 at 09:02 AM.
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