I would take a class, or just study real poetry. this was painful to read (and not in a good way). you're using hackneyed rhymes and...I don't even know what else to say. this is uncreative, uninteresting...bland. |
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Last edited by MementoMori; 04-08-2010 at 11:15 PM. Reason: do not...
I would take a class, or just study real poetry. this was painful to read (and not in a good way). you're using hackneyed rhymes and...I don't even know what else to say. this is uncreative, uninteresting...bland. |
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Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.
Repost the poem. I'm sure there are people who are willing to give their opinions without insulting you. Maybe it's not the best poem ever written, but I would like to read it, so please put it back up. We're not all like him. |
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LRT: edited your post, no need for that, situation handled. |
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"MementoMori, the lucid machine"
"There's nothing better than knowing what it's like to fly like superman. Being fully aware of the air whipping by you, controlling every movement of every single atom in your body with a single thought. It's real freedom, and there's not a word good enough to describe it, so I'll just call it dreamy for now."
is this acceptable? :') |
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Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.
the cool thing about it is, the poem was going on and on about 'something something sick of all the lies I want people to just tell me the truth' I don't know it was so boring I don't remember exactly :c |
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Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.
You're like school in the summer time, nerve. No class. |
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Art
The ability to happily respond to any adversity is the divine.
Dream Journal Shaman Apprentice Chronicles
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"MementoMori, the lucid machine"
"There's nothing better than knowing what it's like to fly like superman. Being fully aware of the air whipping by you, controlling every movement of every single atom in your body with a single thought. It's real freedom, and there's not a word good enough to describe it, so I'll just call it dreamy for now."
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