Monocycles

alright, this is my first DJ entry on this site, so if people would be kind enough to leave comments on how i could improve my layout, storytelling, or overall experience it would be appreciated.

My Dream: My dream starts off with me and a friend playing a game that looks like a mix between halo and WOW, with you playing as master chief but in the WOW universe. We walk up to a terrace overgrown with plants that several players are standing on. We go up and ask whats going on. one says "You can get this awesome achievement if you beat this dragon using the turrets on the top of that building". My friend decides to try it and quickly fails. I say "I'll try" but he says "Dude your such a noob, if I can't do it, you can't do it". I try anyway. The combat is pretty simple, there are 4 turrets on top of the building, and you shoot at the dragon while dodging his attacks. I do this for a while and i'm down to a very small amount of health and i think I'm going to die. Suddenly my friend says "he's down here playing dead, come get him!!" I walk down and see the dragon. I notice that there is suddenly a timer in the corner, and a gate that appears out of nowhere that i decide i have to get into before the timer runs out. I run by the dragon and throw two grenades as I'm running past. Unfortunately one bounces off. I stop running toward the gate, turn around, walk a few steps and throw another grenade at the dragon. While that happens my friend screams "DUDE WHAT ARE YOU DOING". I turn around and run back toward the gate and say in a really badass voice, "Getting an achievement", right before the grenade explodes killing then dragon. The screen goes black for a few seconds and i'm not sure if i made it through the gate in time, when suddenly the screen says CONGRAGULATIONS, and the dream ends.