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      Abra's Submission: OUT OF TIME

      It has a nameless main character, and a side character. The point of this piece should be very direct. Enjoy!



      Spoiler for Out of Time:

      I had to put white underscores to create the effect of using tabs. I'm betting there was an easier way--I just couldn't figure it out.

      Please post your comments!
      Last edited by Abra; 03-16-2008 at 09:02 PM.
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      Quote Originally Posted by OldSparta
      I murdered someone, there was bloody everywhere. On the walls, on my hands. The air smelled metallic, like iron. My mouth... tasted metallic, like iron. The floor was metallic, probably iron

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      ...Wow. I'm speechless. Really. When I can once more form conscious thought enough to tell you how much I loved this, I will post back.

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      Wow that was really good Abra

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      I like it. And thats hard to get from me...

      It definitely fits the topic well. I haven't scoped much of the rest of he competition, but... I know enough now to know my place.

      Great job.
      I am posting on topic elsewhere for the most part.

      My DJ here at DVs, Realized Aspiration only contains old dreams. I'll be around for the occasional chat, and some unfinished/unstarted RPs.

      And you, yeah you, with the ice cream hands. You, yeah you, are my friend. ~ Still my mentor, and an awesome guy.

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      Very very good

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      Thanks for all your nice comments, guys. =D
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      Quote Originally Posted by OldSparta
      I murdered someone, there was bloody everywhere. On the walls, on my hands. The air smelled metallic, like iron. My mouth... tasted metallic, like iron. The floor was metallic, probably iron

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      Quote Originally Posted by Abra View Post
      Thanks for all your true comments, guys. =D
      Corrected.
      I am posting on topic elsewhere for the most part.

      My DJ here at DVs, Realized Aspiration only contains old dreams. I'll be around for the occasional chat, and some unfinished/unstarted RPs.

      And you, yeah you, with the ice cream hands. You, yeah you, are my friend. ~ Still my mentor, and an awesome guy.

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      That is a quite impressive piece. In fact it was so impressive I had to go and typeset it with TeX (but not changing anything), producing this pdf file here, which should be quite a bit more printable, and more readable (and more impressive ). I hope you don't mind.

      PS. You can have the TeX source as well, if you want (after all it is your writing), but if you don't know what TeX is it probably won't be of any use to you.

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      The file...
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      Quote Originally Posted by RedfishBluefish View Post
      The file...
      So you know, she's not ignoring you, she's left the internet temporarily.

      I'm sure she'll thank you kindly when she gets back.
      I am posting on topic elsewhere for the most part.

      My DJ here at DVs, Realized Aspiration only contains old dreams. I'll be around for the occasional chat, and some unfinished/unstarted RPs.

      And you, yeah you, with the ice cream hands. You, yeah you, are my friend. ~ Still my mentor, and an awesome guy.

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