Short Poem

ummm... I decided i would post a poem I wrote. Tell me your honest opinons about it. If it sucks or is stupid, then tell me. If you like it then that's good too! Sorry but it has no title.



Choke, Until I drown,
Choke, Until I can't see,
Choke, On my own iggnorance,
Choke on morality,
No one knows where it's begun,
Desperate, To be happy,
Desperate, To go away free,
Desperate, To know what's right,
Desperate to know of me,
Desperate, To know where to search,
Time will whisper messages to you,
It's rocked back and forth,
Only one place to escape,
Only one place to go,
Only one way to get there,
Asleep, In a warm thought........


This is actually one of my worst poems. Just it's the most recent. Tell me what you think of it.......

hmm...I kinda like it actually..I like the flow, the way you used one word at the beginning in several lines, don't believe I've ever seen that in a poem. very neat, I like it~