I enjoy writing poetry (I think right now I've written over 230) and since it's night, I decided to submit a couple darker ones. |
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I enjoy writing poetry (I think right now I've written over 230) and since it's night, I decided to submit a couple darker ones. |
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I read "love like death" and couldn't bring myself to read the second. Cliche line, cliche line, cliche line, cliche line, cliche line. Have you ever heard of imagery? You need to be able to show, along with your tell. You need some substance with your angst. You're no Plath. |
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You're right, I think I'm going to be working on that. |
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Yeah I am glad artrelis already said something, so I am not the first one to be an asshole, because to be honest I think it is stereotypical emo-poetry. |
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“What a peculiar privilege has this little agitation of the brain which we call 'thought'” -Hume
Plath has such a bad rap, too. She's considered the 'angst' poet, but she does such a great job of doing it. She actually has very beautiful poetry. Bee Keepers Daughter is phenominal. When she talks about "a garden of mouthings," it is completely sensual and perfectly written. Her imagery is very captivating. |
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Thanks for the criticism. It always helps me to see how horrible I am to other people. |
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If you want to see some amazing imagery without all the angst, check out Elizabeth Bishop. She is my favorite poet. If you can get your hands on "The Moose," you'll fall in love with it. |
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