Would anyone care to tell me what you think of my poem?

**Purple Panda** · 04-16-2008 01:47 AM

Today we started our poetry unit in creative writing.
Oddly enough the topic for our first poem was dreaming. (Thought of you guys)

I don't think this classify as dreaming or lucid dreaming but if it does then please tell me where to move it.

The initial poem was helped to get us a general 4 lined poem with pre-made starts.

Title: Lens of truth
Line one: In my dream I gleefully entered everyones nightmare
Line 2: (Tell what happened in your dream) I broke from this fictional world
Line 3: (Tell what you felt, saw or heard in your dream) I saw the morbid truth for what it is
Line 4: (End result of your dream) If even it took a lifetime to see an hour of truth I'd do it.

Then she told us to expand from there and write 2 sections? (blocks?) with 4 lines in each.

I kinda of got carried away and it took about 20 minutes to write and thought it was pretty decent. My friends really liked it but said they couldn't understand it and didn't feel like speculating on it too much.

So, here is the end product (Haven't edited it yet.)

In the night I close my eyes
Waiting excitedly for my next tale of lies
In this plane of imagination
Any “known” fact is hereby fiction

In these realities of my own
Anything I do is literally dough
These faces I see, the ones I steal
Are as real to me, as the pain you feel

I live in your reality
Seeing nothing but symbolized fatalities
Endlessly seeking an escape
The ones I find are the ones I make

I walked this path I made my own
To a fellow who refuses those of flesh and bone
He gave me some words of advice
That were claimed to assist me in my next life

I was told the truth he sees
Will be waiting for me by that tree
Weather I choose it is up to me
Unlike when I normally agree

I accepted his gift and grinned at this
He offered to take it back “ignorance is bliss”
I walked off without a canned formal good-bye
For I now know what awaits me, when I die

If you read it could you tell me on a scale of 1-10 on how much you enjoyed it? Perhaps tell me a way to rephrase certain lines because some seemed a little off to me.

What do you guys think it means? What do you believe happened in the poem?

Also, keep in mind I haven't written anything poetic for as long as I can remember so this poem is really the first piece of work I'm proud of in ages.