Blood Nightmare - Part One

[slayer]

Blood Nightmare I was chatting with my online friend about recent news. I don’t really pay attention to the news because I’m too busy playing video games to care. My friend sent me some pictures of some people’s death. I didn’t really want to see them, but I opened the pictures anyway. He was telling me about how five kids jumped off a roof together as a suicide. He then sent me a picture of some guy’s arm nearly hacked off. It wasn’t a pretty sight, but seeing them as pictures made it easier on me. After talking for another hour, a user joined our chat room. We both greeted him, but there was no reply. We decided to ignore him and kept talking about what’s been going on lately. About an hour or so later, my friend said his goodbyes and logged off. As soon as he logged off, that other user sent me a link to a website. I opened up the picture and examined it. It was some drawing of what looked like a person. Except this person had metal steaks sticking out of him. He was pinned to a wall and there was blood all around him. Or at least that’s what it looked like. Hard to tell what everything is when it’s drawn. I had a bad feeling about that picture. It gave my stomach an upset feeling unlike those real pictures I was sent by my friend. I minimized the picture and went to ask the user a question, but he’d already signed off. I decided to shut down my computer and head to bed. I laid down and looked at my alarm clock. It said 6:50 A.M. Sunday, 2008. I don’t know why, but my clock never says what day it is exactly, only the day of the week. I would only get about 30 minutes of sleep until I had to get up and get ready for school. I quickly fell asleep. I woke up to my alarm clock going off. It said 8:00 P.M. I was already late for school, so I decided not to rush things. I got up normally and took a shower. While I was taking my shower, I started to think about that picture that I was sent. “Why would some random person send me that?” I said. I decided not to think about it for the rest of the day. I got out of the shower and got dressed. When I walked out of the bathroom I noticed the clock said 9:20 P.M. “Damn, was I in there for that long?” I thought to myself. I grabbed my bag and headed out the door. Unfortunately, I made it to school on time to be in English class. It’s the one class I hate the most. I don’t have anything personal against it, I just find it very boring. When I walked into the room, I was greeted by some friends. “Late again I see…” My friend said. “Yeah yeah, I just want this day to be over with.” I said. “You always want it to be other with.” “I know. I hate school. You should know that.” “Ok, class is starting now, everyone take your seats!” The teacher said. The day seemed to go by pretty fast. After school was out I headed over to the arcade with some of my friends until it was late. The sun was almost down and all my friends had a curfew. Luckily I didn’t. I decided to walk the other way they were going. I stepped into a hotel building to use the bathroom. When I got out and looked outside, it was already pretty dark., so I decided to head home. I decided I wanted to take a shortcut through an alleyway. When I got to the alleyway, I turned and noticed a girl standing in the middle of it staring at something that was on the wall. Her face looked horrified, like she’d seen a ghost or something. I found it weird that she had pink hair. It was hard to tell, but it looked like there was some red stuff all over her shirt and face. The only thing lighting up the alleyway was a blue fluorescent light. I looked down and noticed the red stuff was all around her. I looked up to what she was looking at and couldn’t quite make it out. I narrowed my eyes trying to focus on it. Once I saw what it was, I froze. It was a man pinned to the wall. He had metal steaks sticking out of him all over. I couldn’t move a muscle. I was shocked. Then, the girl slowly tilted her head toward me. When she looked at me, I snapped out of my shocked state and ran off. I headed straight home. I ran inside my house and ran straight for my room. I slammed my door shut and ran into my computer desk. I quickly opened up the drawing of the man pinned to the wall. I slowly walked away from my computer and tripped on something laying of the floor. I banged my head on my desk that was laying next to my bed. I then slowly passed out. Part One - Complete I don't write a lot of stories...so sorry if this one isn't great. I'm going to make 3 parts to the story.

[Kanano]

That was fairly interesting to read Not sure how the guy got the picture before it happened, but that's chapters 2 & 3. I'll check them out when you write them. I want to know who the girl was too.

[slayer]

The other user sent him the picture. "About an hour or so later, my friend said his goodbyes and logged off. As soon as he logged off, that other user sent me a link to a website."

[slayer]

I updated the first post because I forgot to mention that she had pink hair. Although it's not very important, I like to make my character stand out some.

[slayer]

Blood Nightmare - Part Two I arose to my mom waking me up. She must of took the day off of work. She usually always goes to work about two hours before I have to get up for school. So she woke me up and I did my usual routine of getting dressed and taking a shower. When I walked back into my room, I noticed that my computer was turned on, and my email was flashing. I opened up the email and it contained two pictures. The first was a drawing of a man that looked horrified. His hands were sticking in front of his face like he was trying to protect himself from something. The second was the same person falling out of a window. Except this one had a trail of blood leading all the way to the window where the man was falling out of. When I saw the picture, I remembered about seeing the guy pinned to the wall. I quickly closed out of the email and grabbed my bag and headed to school. I tried to forget about everything I saw. As I was walking to school, one of my friends caught up to me. “Dude, you have to come see this!” He said. “See what?” I replied. “Just come on!” He grabbed my arm and pulled me to the other side of the street. We turned the corner and saw a group of people gathered around an alley way. Police men were pushing people back telling them to just move on, that there wasn’t anything to see here. My friend and I stood across the street. From the angle we were at, we could see the body just fine. It was the man that was pinned to the wall. “Isn’t that sick? I can’t believe someone died like that.” He said. All I did was stare at it. I looked down to where some of the blood was. Then, a flash of that girls face appeared in front of me. She was there. But there were no footprints around the body. “How would have she gotten away without leaving footprints?” I thought to myself. “Hey man, you alright?” He said. “Yeah, I’m fine. Let’s go.” I replied. We kept walking and came to a crosswalk. I hit the button to change the street light to red so we could walk across. After I hit the button, I looked forward and saw her. It was that girl with pink hair I saw in the alley way. Except this time, she had a more serious looking face, like she meant business. She was staring right at me. “I have to catch her!” I thought. So I ran straight for her. I forgot about the crosswalk and any incoming cars. My friend quickly grabbed the back of my shirt and pulled me back. As soon as he did that, a car went flying by in front of me missing me by a few inches. “Hey man! What are you trying to do? Kill yourself?” He said. When the car passed, I looked back to where the girl was standing, and she was gone. I looked both ways across the street for any cars this time. None of the cars were close enough for me to worry about. I jolted across the crosswalk and stood right where she was standing. I looked all around. “She couldn’t have gotten far.” I thought to myself. I noticed that there was a hotel building right beside me. I ran inside and headed straight for the clerk’s desk. I asked the girl sitting at the desk if she’d seen a girl with pink hair walk in here. She said that she took the elevator. She didn’t know which floor she went to though. I ran straight for the elevator and pressed the up button. Waiting for those doors to open felt like an eternity. Once the doors opened, I accidentally ran straight into a man. “Hey watch it!” He said. “Very sorry! You didn’t happen to see a girl with pink hair go in here did you?” I asked. “Yeah, she went to the fourth floor. Why do you ask?” “Well, she’s my girlfriend, and we kind of had a fight and I want to make it up to her.” I’m not good at making things up on the spot. I figured that if they ever did catch the girl, then maybe I’d be called in later for suspicion of being her boyfriend. Which I’m not. Once I hit the button to the fourth floor, and the elevator doors closed. Some of that cheap music started playing. It felt like one of those awkward situations where the good guy just got in some big fight and then all this calm music plays in the background. The doors open and I ran out into the hallway. I started to quickly walk down the hallway looking at the doors. I wasn’t sure what I was looking for though. I heard a scream come from inside a room beside me. I slammed on the door asking if everything was alright. I wasn’t sure why I even bothered knocking on the door. But I had a gut feeling something was bad. I waiting a few seconds and there was no reply. I put my hand on the door handle and slowly turned it. Usually these doors would be locked. But whoever was living here must have forgotten to lock it. As soon as I opened the door the first thing I noticed was the girl standing in the middle of the room. “Hey! Who are you?!” I yelled. She turned her body around and gave me this creepy smile. When she did that, I noticed the blood around her. It led all the way out to the window. She was holding something in her hand. I couldn’t help but stare and notice that it was a human arm. She turned completely around and took a step toward me. I snapped out of my shocked state again and ran straight for the stair case. I ran straight out of the hotel and headed home. I felt like I was running faster then ever. My heart was pounding so hard I felt like it was about to come out of my chest. Once I made it home I slammed the door shut and put myself up against it. I took some deep breathes and noticed I was missing something. I looked around me and saw that my bag was gone. “Shit! I must have dropped it back at the hotel!” I thought to myself. Not only does my bag have all my home work in it, that I don’t care about, it also had my home address. I didn’t know what to do. I went to my room and told my mom that I was sick and not to come in. My mom is very nice and knows not to bother me when I say so. I stood in my room until it was nighttime. I kept trying to figure out why I was sent these pictures of these dead people, and then later found out that these people actually die. I laid down on my bed for a few minutes. My mom came in knocking on my door. I got startled so badly I almost hit my alarm clock off. “Sorry honey, but there’s a girl waiting outside for you. She says she’s a friend from school.” She said. “A girl? I don’t talk to any girls at school…” I replied. “Well, just be sure to keep your door open.” She said smiling a little. I got up out of bed and noticed it was raining outside. I stretched a little and walked to the front door. As soon as I put my hand on the door handle, my heart felt like it skipped a beat. My whole body froze. I started to shake all over. I wasn’t sure why. Then, my body unwillingly opened the door, and there she was. The girl I saw in the alleyway and in the hotel. Standing in the rain under an umbrella holding my bag. Part Two - Complete One more part to go.

[slayer]

Blood Nightmare - Part Three I couldn’t move my body at all. I didn’t know what to say or do. “Well, are you just going to let a lady stand out in the rain like this?” She said. If I could, I would have slammed the door in her face and ran to my room, but I simply just stepped aside letting her in. I couldn’t do anything I told my body to do. It just acted on it’s own. “Let’s go somewhere private.” She said in a seductive voice. I headed for my bedroom and she followed behind me. My mom walked by and said to leave the door open again. At this point, I was screaming in my head at my mom to not even let me go in my room with her. I guess I didn’t have a scared look on my face because my mom didn’t say anything about it. As we entered the room I walked near my computer desk. I seemed to have gained control of my body. I turned around and saw her holding the door shut looking at me with an evil smile. She threw my bag on the floor and took a step toward me. When she did that, my computer made a beeping noise. I glanced at it and saw that I had a new message. She stood there looking at me. “Well, aren’t you going to read it?” She asked. I slowly reached for the mouse and double-clicked on my email. I opened up the picture only to find a drawing of someone dead. They were laying on a bed with their jaw and chest sliced open. It was a picture of me. I became so uneasy I almost threw up. I became very dizzy. I stumbled away from the desk tripping over some dirty clothes on the floor landing on my bed. She jumped on top of me holding me down with her body. Her hands holding my arms down so I couldn’t fight back. I don’t think I could fight back at the moment anyway. I was too shocked to move. Just then, my dad walks in the room. Now, from what he saw must have been an awkward situation for him. He saw a girl about my age sitting on top of me holding me down on my bed, but in reality, I was about to die. I couldn’t mutter a word. I wanted to yell at my dad to get her off of me. He simply closed the door and said “Excuse me.” Once the door closed, I snapped out of my shocked state, and, luckily, was stronger than the girl and threw her off of me. I ran straight for an antique knife I got from my grandma a few years ago. I wasn’t sure how strong it was but it was the only I had to defend myself with. I pointed it straight at her and as she was standing up she said… “What? So your going to stab me now?” She said, “Fine then, do it right in my chest! Come on! KILL ME!” I closed my eyes and lunged straight for her. I heard the sound of the knife penetrating her flesh. When I opened my eyes, I could see the horrified look on her face. I backed away and she took a few steps backward. After a second at staring at each other, she collapsed to the floor. The sound of her hitting the floor and blood splat on the ground almost made me throw up again. “I killed her. Thank god…” I said to myself. I stood there and looked at my hands. They were covered in blood. Then it hit me. “I killed her…” I said uneasily, “What have I done?!” I started to break down in tears. I didn’t want to put my hands over my face because I would have gotten blood all over me. So I just stood there looking at my hands crying. I heard someone starting to laugh. I froze again. I slowly looked down and she the girl starting to stand up. “Ha ha ha ha ha, you can’t kill me…” She said. She stood straight up and pulled the knife out of her chest. Some blood squirted out and went over my bed and clothes and some on the wall. She slowly walked toward me and I slowly walked backwards. I walked as far back as I could, then I backed into a corner. She kept walking closer to me and laughed a little. I was about to die. I couldn’t tell my family I loved them or anything. I wouldn’t see my friends again. I wouldn’t be able to see anyone… I shut my eyes and waited for her to stab me to death. I could hear her getting closer. Then she stopped. I shut my eyes even harder and was expecting her to slice my neck open. All I heard was something hitting the floor. I slowly opened my eyes and saw her holding me. “What the hell is going on?” I thought to myself. She looked up at me and whispered into my ear, “It’s time to wake up honey.” Everything started to fade to black slowly. All I could hear was her saying “It’s time to wake up,” in my ear. Everything became black. I could hear my heart pounding. I heard someone say “It’s time to wake up” again, and flung forward out of my bed. It was my alarm clock. I quickly looked around my room. There was no blood on the ground, and no sign of a struggle. I patted my chest to make sure everything was still there. I shut off my alarm clock. It said 7:30 A.M. Sunday, 2008. “Sunday? It can’t be Sunday.” I thought to myself. After thinking for a bit, I walked straight to my computer and looked through my mail. I didn’t have any of those pictures that were sent to me from before. My computer also said it was Sunday. “That wasn’t all a dream was it?” I thought. I got dressed and skipped a shower. My bag was where I last left it, not where that girl threw it at. I decided to walk down the street and pass the alley way where I first saw the girl. No one was there, and there was no dead body. I then headed for the hotel that she went into. I asked the girl at the front desk if she’d ever seen a girl with pink hair. Her response was “No.” I proceeded to school keeping an eye out for anything out of the ordinary. I wasn’t sure exactly what I was expecting to find, a dead body maybe? I went into my classroom and sat at my desk. I overheard some kids talking about some new student. They said that the new student had some funny looking hair. I took out my Ipod and zoned out of everything else until the school bell rang. Once it rang, I proceeded to turning off my Ipod. As it was turning off, my teacher said… “Good morning class, we have a new student today.” The teacher announced, “Her name is Yuriko Toshiko. She’s a transfer student from Japan.” I looked up and was shocked at what I saw. It was that girl. The girl I saw in my dream. The one in the alley way and hotel. “It’s nice to meet you all. I hope to make lots of friends here.” She said. After she said that, I heard my music playing. I looked down at my Ipod and it had a picture on it. It was the same picture of me except I wasn’t all cut up, and she was laying next to me asleep. It had some text on it that said “I’m not done with you yet…” It had a little drawing of a smiley face on it. I looked back up at her and saw that she was looking straight at me, smiling. Blood Nightmare - Complete

[ClouD]

Good story, and decently paced. It was absorbing enough for me to read the whole thing without getting distracted at all. Though there is a suggestion I'd make for the future. There's a few times where things are stated, and seem kind of unnatural to the character as opposed to narrator. Nice weight to it, fun read.

[Chameleon]

Hi slayer Part One grabbed and held my attention. One teeny weeny thing. I might be wrong, but I think the man might have had metal stakes sticking out of him, rather than steaks? Steaks conjure up something amusing rather than scary! Cham

[nitsuJ]

Hi slayer Part One grabbed and held my attention. One teeny weeny thing. I might be wrong, but I think the man might have had metal stakes sticking out of him, rather than steaks? Steaks conjure up something amusing rather than scary! Cham that's what i thought when i first read "steaks" i was like 'metal food' lol but the story was AWESOME! keep up the good work

[slayer]

haha, well I didn't exatcly pass english class for most of the year! And damn us english people for having words that are pronounced the same way, but spelt differently...

[Kanano]

"The other user sent him the picture." I meant the other user, not the main character. I kinda worded that badly. sorry. I liked the story a lot. It was interesting, and the characters were decent. The girl was my favorite character Pink haired girl killers <3 I just partly wish you hadn't done the "it was all a dream" thing, that blindsided me actually. It's been awhile since I've seen a story end like that. I was like "what? nooo "

[Afterglow]

Nice read, well written and interesting enough to keep me from doing my extension english work. So for that I thank you, you have saved me from half an hour of classroom boredom. But yeah good, fun read and well paced.

[slayer]

Thanks! I would like to know some thing I could improve on. I plan on re-writing this when school time comes around and I have to write a story...

[-Blakren-]

I wish their was a psycho, pink haired girl in my bedroom Nice story slayer! Since you can draw and write good storys, I can see you in the future creating a manga series.

[slayer]

Oh man you have no idea how awesome it would be for me to actually draw a manga series... I'm just not sure what I would write about though... It would have to be some kind of thriller/horror/sci-fi with a hint of comedy.

[-Blakren-]

You should write the manga on the story you wrote. If it was published I'd buy it! By the way, has anybody else who has read the story picture the characters in anime style? I know I did.

[slayer]

Well, I got the story idea from the description of the Visual Novel Chaos;Head (which should be released sometime soon). There will be an anime airing in October.

[no-Name]

Im a bit late here, i meant to read it quite a while back. The whole idea is amazing, it would be an amazing anime. I loved it all the way through. The only thing you might want to change, is add a bit more detail, explain their expressions a bit more vividly. Other than that, A+

[slayer]

lol yeah slightly late. I always have trouble giving better descriptions on things. And if I was better, then this story would probably be better.