Thanks for the criticism. I know what you mean about the first paragraph. I was trying to, through structure, get across an idea of 'mechanical thought' which gets expanded on further on in the book, and like I said this is the first bit that I'm reasonably happy with, having said that it's still very much in its first draft phase lol. The main title that I've had in my head since I started thinking about writing is 'Leviathan Automaton' but I'm really not sure, and I've also considered 'seed of the machine' (but I don't like it nearly as much lol). Anyways thanks for the critique and there'll definately be more pages in the future.