There's a few things you spelled wrong there, which you might wanna check on. Like naive, which is spelled like that, not 'naieve.' Other than that, the rest looked like they may have just been typos.

But as for the poem, it wasn't really compelling, mostly because the use of an uncommon word drags on any meaning of the poem. And people don't wanna look in a dictionary to fully understand a poem. You can be poetic in using short, common words. And it's usually much more effective and pleasing. Like I'd rather see the word face in a poem than visage, because using visage just makes it sound like you're trying to sound profound.

I dunno, I'm kinda picky about poems. And have only been impressed by two, ever.