The Thief (poem)

[Roller]

Hey well this is just a little something that kind of took me by surprise the other night after I'd been for a walk outside. It's not deep and meaningful by any account, but I rather like it if I may say so myself... it gave me a pleasent feeling the way all the words kinda fell together. Anyways, here's what I've got so far, only short but I'm thinking of adding some more. The Thief Secretly stealing and silently sliding A shadow out the back door. The night-time is listening, moonlight glistening As footsteps echo some more. The stars in the heavens burn cold with suspicion, As whispers walk on tiptoes In mischievous fashion, with dark cunning passion The thief this way quickly did go. here's a stanza I wrote the other night to add to it a little more, but I'm not quite sure if it fits in, or even if I should just leave the poem as the two stanzas above... He mooves through the night seeking treasured delights; Such jewels few men have seen. If a house he should find and fix his fearless mind, He'd sweet-talk the door-lock free. let me know what you guys think.

[poeticDreamer]

I'd go ahead and add it. Interesting content, and I can see the alliteration on the first line. Also, nice attempt at internal rhyme as well with "listening" and "glistening." Since this forum's main focus isn't poetry, I'll leave it at that. But if you're interested in more feedback, IM me later.

[Krrish]

Good work. I dont have much knowledge in english. I have read ur blog posts. I started to learn about lucid dreams from ur blog posts. I think that u r a writer with very good caliber.

[Roller]

Oh hey I remember you! Good to see you've made it to Dreamviews, if you need any help with anything feel free to send me a message. 8)