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      The Deep

      The Deep

      ___________

      New Skin
      oh God I tear it up.
      I bleed
      bleed
      I love the taste
      I feel, feel
      I feel the pain
      the deep
      the cut
      the sickness...
      it's deep
      so deep
      I want to vomit.
      but..I can't feel anymore.

      ripping skin from my torso
      it makes me sick
      and when I jump,
      and when I hit the ground,
      you know it makes me twitch.
      everytime it makes me twitch.

      and when I feel the blade,
      when I feel it's destruction, it's violence,
      it's just a feeling you know.
      ..nothing more than a feeling...

      oh GOD the pain
      the deep...
      IT HURTS!

      deeper and deeper,
      into my skin.
      ..but I can't feel anymore.

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      made it up just now. but it's not just words...it all has meaning. I really feel it. don't think it's just words...
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      hmmm...the imagery...the blood.
      "i am the crumpled sheets of paper behind an artists' attempt at perfection"


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      people don't understand them, my poems. the meanings run so much deeper that what it seems. I should just keep them to myself...I'm no poet. not yet anyway.


      Ignorant bliss is an oxymoron; but so is miserable truth.

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      I think most people who write have a deeper meaning behind what they write...

      when im writing, its like i replace the ink in the pen with blood from my heart, and pour it out on paper.

      i want to post some of my stuff...but im very cautious of who sees it or not, and im going to put it into music.
      "i am the crumpled sheets of paper behind an artists' attempt at perfection"


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      Paperdoll, whats the deeper meaning behind it?

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      thats for her to know and you to ponder.
      clear eyes. strong hands.

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      This poem made me think of pain. What makes pain hurt? What makes pain so...painful? Why do we hate pain? It is, after all, just a feeling.

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      Don't know why, but I sometimes like pain. I'll smash my foot on the stairs in the dark and it will hurt then feel good. Ahhhhh.

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      Originally posted by Lowercase Society
      I think most people who write have a deeper meaning behind what they write...

      when im writing, its like i replace the ink in the pen with blood from my heart, and pour it out on paper.

      i want to post some of my stuff...but im very cautious of who sees it or not, and im going to put it into music.
      You took the words right out of my mouth. The ink in the pen is my blood and emotion as well. Well said.

      “Wanting to be someone else is a waste of the person you are.”
      - Kurt Cobain (1967 – 1994)

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      cocodan, you sound masochistic...

      as for the poem, it makes me sad...i had to stop reading it sorry

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      I don't do it on purpose though.

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      That's the thing about writing, its all about words. If you think about it we aren't creating anything, we are just taking the language and rearranging it, so it can fit our spirits and thoughts. When I write I feel very intensely... Sometimes I feel pain and desperation so intense and deep that I can't express it...I write what I feel, convey as much as I can, but it is not enough....There are no words that can describe true emotion, for it very subjective, not everyone feels the same way, even when it is the "same" emotion....

      Thus, words hardly ever come off as an accurate representation of our true feelings, and we feel misunderstood, just like you feel that way right now, Paperdoll. The only way that one can understand that emotion is if they have actually ever felt like that, not only the way that you convey it, but the way they felt it and couldn't really comunicate it either.

      Another complication is that poetry is also up for interpretation, and it adjusts itself to our own experiences as well. That makes it even harder for the person to get the message in its complete purity, but is nonetheless effective. In this moment, I believe I understand not only what you wrote, but the true feeling behind it. It is imposible to tell if the feeling is the same, but what I do know is that your writing has made me reminisce about this particular feeling I once experienced, and brings me back to that train of thought.

      Unless people have never felt like that before, or similar at all, your poems will never be in vein, and even if they never felt it, it should still merit reflection. Anyway, don't keep them to yourself, believe me, there are some of us that care....

      P.S. I have never posted any of my deep stuff, I generally keep it to myself. I am quite sensitive about many of my darkest writings. I am glad to see there are others that apreciated this sort of thing, and hopefully I will post some of my real stuff soon.....
      If I hadn't made me
      I'd be more inclined to bow
      Powers that be would have swallowed me up
      But that's more than I can allow...

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      Nice, paperdoll!

      I don't judge other people's art, I just enjoy it for existing as it does. And I applaud you for sharing, paperdoll, it's a vulnerable thing!
      I can definitely relate to this piece, but still can't claim to understand.
      hmmm, maybe i'll share some myself...

      SOoo - in conclusion...I'm glad you share, don't stop just because you think we won't understand, it's only important that we perceive indiscriminantly...aaaand...oh, art is good.
      "Nothing is true. All is permitted." -last words of Hassan i Sabbah X
      "As understanding reaches everywhere can you be innocent?" -tao te ching 12

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      Paperdoll-EP -people don't understand them, my poems. the meanings run so much deeper that what it seems. I should just keep them to myself...I'm no poet. not yet anyway.[/b]
      Who judges who is a poet and who isn't?
      Why keep them to yourself? Although some might not realize the depth that you intended some might still get somthing from it. Not to mention it is problably theroputic to yourself.

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