Very creative, but I hope the poem only represents some feelings you would not act upon. Keep writing - obviously you have a nack for it. |
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Very creative, but I hope the poem only represents some feelings you would not act upon. Keep writing - obviously you have a nack for it. |
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In actuality, it heard this as more of a laid-back rap when I read it. It had a great flow to it, very smooth. And while depressed themes may be common, you portrayed it a little differently and steered clear of the angst. |
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"If there was one thing the lucid dreaming ninja writer could not stand, it was used car salesmen."
thanks. |
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Good stuff, man. I agree with Ame. 100% |
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I also liked your poem, man. The words flow, and the subject matter is real and relevant. |
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Shine on, you crazy diamond!
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Well the poem technically is nice. |
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