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      Another shorty

      This has no title....

      I wish on weeps of cries,
      Devouring the light around me,
      I've been chosen to...,
      My nails are broken,
      My eyes are "fixed",
      What would you do if I said no more?,

      Wondering away into this...,
      I didn't realize my own pain,
      As you were pushing away,
      Pushing me into this...,
      I'm throwing myself out,
      Fly in red,
      Lay in red,
      See red,
      No colors to describe intentions,
      Not clear enough to see,
      So caught up into my own secrets,
      I have to find my way out...
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      Well that's it, sorry if I wasted your time.


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      Actually I liked it... especially the fact you didn't name it...



      "This is the magic, that a name would stain..."
      -Dark Tranquillity
      Early Morning Moment,
      A Glimpse of Joy,
      But soon it's Over, and I return to Dust...

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      I didn't think it was a waste of my time at all.

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      Certainley did not waste my time. I have read it three times & each time it evoked a different thought.

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      Thanks ALOT for the comments guys/girls. I didn't know if anyone would actually like my poems so I wasn't sure if I should post or not. Well, thanks again. Makes me feel good about myself.


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      see? I told you. your poems are good! ^ -^


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