"Heaven" 3 pieces of prose....

[:: astounded ::]

These were written last semester as a creative writing assignment. I was to write three different depections of what I think heaven may be like. Here you go... comments and constructive criticism appreciated! Heaven A You will wake up in the arms of an angel pressed tightly against her bosom. Her body is sublimely soft and perfectly warm. Her silky hair smells sweet and rests gently in the small of her collarbone, Her hands roam your body and send ecstasy riveting through you like orgasmic lightning. She seems to know everything you want; where to move, when to moan, when to scream. Time does not exist along with worry, pain, fear or hunger. You do not tire or hesitate. You do not stop. Heaven B You will wake up in another world. Thousands of wondrous creatures lives and breathes around you. Some of them are made of light, they dance in patterns that excite and mesmerize your beyond perfect vision. You will taste the fruits of this new world and with each bite the scenery manipulates around you and grows more beautiful. You will eventually find the fruit of life and this magnificent world you are in will then become your own to control, create, and modify. The images you desire and creatures you imagine spring to life, each one emitting streams of ecstasy through your eyes, through your mind and they will surge through your body with a feeling or pure bliss never experienced by any other being. It is your creation of nirvana. Heaven C You will wake up alone in a sphere of brilliant white light. First she will appear in a soft mist, searching your mind for everything you love, everything that turns you on. She is molded from a culmination of all that you find beautiful. The white sphere around you then transforms into darkness illuminated by specs of light that dramatically dance for your eyes and hers. You embrace your heavenly lover for the first time with a simple kiss. A feeling of joy jumps from her lips to yours. Ecstasy slips from her tongue as it swirls about yours. The lights intensify and begin to spiral about you in a frenzy of pure passion. As you think you are about to climax the specs of light suddenly merge with your body. You will then become an everlasting feeling of bliss by the side of your lover, all that is beautiful.

[A Lost Soul]

Um... wow. Hot and talented. Very nice. I loved them. I think your visualization is wonderful, and the vividity of description... wow. You're a writer. Are you in college? May I ask what classes you are taking? I keep going back to You will wake up in the arms of an angel. There is something about those two simple lines that stirs a deep emotion in my heart, and they set the mood for the rest of the poem(s). Amazing work.

[:: astounded ::]

Thanks for the nice comments Yes, I'm a college sophomore at UNCW. This prose was written for an introductory creative writing class. I just recently switched my major to english professional writing with a minor in creative writing.

[KalmaH]

Not how I picture Heaven (mine bleeds ) but it is very well written. I would choose Heaven B, reminds me of lucid dreaming...