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Basically, the threads regarding poetry dont seem 2 get much of a response on this forum |
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Very moving, Imran. |
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makes you stop and think things over. |
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thanks, for the comments/praise. |
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
Not to bad Irman_P you have a nice talent there for poetry. It's pretty deep and it does make you sit back and think. Thanks for sharing that with us. |
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
stop you're depressing me |
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Moving, ill be sure to always read your poetry posts now. |
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Try making it to conform to iambic pentameter, not saying it's bad as free verse, but I like iambic pentameter, and a good chunk of it was. |
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
888, please refrain from hijacking someone else's thread...if you want to post limericks, then make your own thread for them, where i'm sure people will be happy to respond. |
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'all of the moments that already passed/
try to go back and make them last.'
Hi Imran, I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. I'm really into poetry too and have been writing for the last few years in my spare time. You don't really have to worry about rhythm to make a good poem, but timing and effect are crucial. Also, in my experience I've found that metaphors and personification are really effective. If you give me permission to post a poem on your topic, I'll show you what I mean. |
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<span style="font-family:Arial">I hate the ending myself,
but it started with an alright scene.</span>
Wow Irman. |
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
Sad but beautiful. I enjoyed it, well done =) |
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Currently practicing WILD. I quote Kaniaz who said it best: "The point of WILD is to piss me off". Though, I have not given up, far from it.
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
I really like that last one. Earth, if I'm not mistaken. It's cool because it really does some everything up that's 'important' to us. Maybe everything that's important to our society is what really is the downfall? |
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Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
Look out on a summers day,
with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.
Thanks for the input |
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"...You want to reclaim your mind and get it out of the hands of the cultural engineers who want to turn you into a half-baked moron consuming all this trash that's being manufactured out of the bones of a dying world..." - Terence McKenna
Previously known as imran_p
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