Heya, I'm trying to get some feedback on my story. Right now it's posted on www.fictionpress.com and www.fanfiction.com, and I have had very little feedback about it. Anybody interested can read the story at this page: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1961765/1/
If you have any feedback, you can post it here or review on that site. If anybody wants a copy of the story, I can send it to you via email.

Edit: If you wanna see some of the pictures from it, they're on the site for that story.