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      A Quick Poem I did on the spot (comments please)

      I wake up, lying, in my waking life with no emotion.
      I have no feeling about anything or anyone
      I've been lying there since you went away
      Each day adds a mark on my guilt for my existance
      The time starts to fall infront of me as I stare
      Nothing is there for me to stare at but the blackness.
      As the sun enters my room I can only weep
      Each tear adds a mark on my guilt for not being there for you
      You could have been someone for everyone to have
      Instead you are attached to nothing
      My vision begins to blur and a sigh is released slowly
      It echoes like the sad wind does through an empty forest.
      Only the empty, lonley animals can hear its cries for help
      I try to answer back but my voice is a stutter of pain and hurt
      My lips begin to die and my head turns away from the awful sun
      My face is wet and my heart is dry
      My body is begging to be held and my eyes need to be seen
      All I recieve are the black stares of the dying animals in the forest
      They understand me more than myself, yet I do not talk to them
      I only wish to talk to you and fix my shattered brain
      Each minute, each second of my life, my body feels less happiness.
      Come back to me and hold my dry heart
      Wipe away my tears and walk with me with me in the wind.

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      wow!
      that is soo touching!

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      Re: A Quick Poem I did on the spot (comments please)

      Originally posted by phallam
      It echoes like the sad wind does through an empty forest.
      Only the empty, lonley animals can hear its cries for help
      That's great phallam, I love your forest metaphor.

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