Thread: Opening Chapter... Constructive Crit. Welcome :)

I have always thought that at the start of any creative display, and introduction should be given. One part of the introduction explains why one wants to take up someone's time with a given piece. Another is the purpose for writing it. Even the Judeo-Christian Scripture uses an introduction, however, because of its demonstration that introduction is not at the start of the text, however, it is included.
Human life is valuable, it is the only value we have. Thus some believe that it is out of respect that we measure our use of someone elses time against our need to take that time from them. If a person desires to waste time, no introduction is needed. Simply write on, but if communicating is important, then a certain amount of interpersonal respect is exchanged by the introduction.

Today, creative writing is seen through the eyes of a child, how clever one can be in heaping words together--yet as you mature you will come to understand that you are, in fact, exchanging life for life--and therefore you think in terms of value added or subtracted from anothers life through the time you ask them to spend with you.

This is why some works, like Aesops fables were important. All language is designed for the modifcation of human behavior such that that behavior maintains and promotes the life of the body. Thus, on some level, a good writer knows the distinction between good and evil, and know that they are exchanging time with the reader--and time is a measure of human life.

All true art then rests upon very clear principles that pertain to life itself. These principles separate that art from heaps of words, globs of paint, piles of stone.

When you understand this, you can see that it is not popularity that determines value--for if you helped billions waste man hours each of their life, you have contributed not as a great author, but as an infamous one. But contrasting this to a work of value, if if it helped but one person to see a little bit better, then you have done more than some of the most popular writers in history. Learn how, and then simply, do the math.

Philosopher: I'm not even sure you read my peice, your post seems to be a pointless rant on the commodification of art. I don't want to be offensive but you come off as pompus and your writing is inarticulate and therefore hard to understand, maybe in the future you can dumb down your speach a little so that thos of us who havn't studied Adorno can understand what you're trying to say. Acting intelligent isn't half as important as being understood. Thanks.

My writing and comprehension skills have been professionally tested, but thanks for the advice.

However, if you think that there is even one difficult idea in anything I have stated, I am amazed. I really am finding it difficult understanding that comprehension levels are generally so low.

And I really believe that if people could act intelligent, they would. On the level of meaning, the construction is a true oxymoron.

I'll take that as a 'no I didnt read your post'. I wonder why you would have needed your writing and comprehension skills to be professionally tested in the first place! It also seems you havn't taken my advice and continue to write in a way which comes across as pompus and arrogant. As i said before, I am not trying to be offensive, just letting you know how you come across and that your writing style is potentially confusing. Perhaps as your signiture would indicate, there is more wisdom in your silence than your words

I see you never asked the question that would lead you to understand the art of comprehension itself.

What can words convey, and how much of what you think you see is only yourself? As long as you cannot distinguish yourself from what you perceive, you will never understand much.

I was tested because the school system thought like you, I obviously was stupid and the test was needed to ship me off to a school for retards, unfortunately the test put me beyond the known genius in the school. And just like you, no one knew what to do with me then. Do you think it is easy living in a world of people just like you? Befor you can understand anything, you will have to get over yourself.

A true artist knows his audience, starting with spectator 1, the self.

This ability is pushed to the limit when learning by the use of prophecy in the lucid dreamstate. You will be led like an ass-- like being led by a carrot on a string--by what ever is teaching there. The hardest thing to learn is to let go of desire, fear, hate, all the things you put into what you see--until you can more clearly see simply what is said.

How I seem to you is simply how you really are.

Fools believe that what can be conventionalized includes the unknowable. You do not know what is in the mind of a writer other than what is said. In the end, one will learn how to hold that mirror up to a reader, by the use of metaphor--like like is done in the Judeo-Christian Scripture.

You are angry with me because what you saw in what you wrote is not what I could see because what you saw was never in the words.

But I did flatter you, by expecting that you had the ability to understand the simple reply I gave.

Learning to think in Truth starts by learning to See in Truth.

Learning in the lucid dreamstate--and in visions, are lessons about perception, conception and will--in truth. That is what it means to be alive, and why it is said that at this point in history, man is still dead.
Simple biological fact based on first principles of being.

Oh, I almost forgot, you skills are also tested in the Lucid Dreamstate. That is pure professionalism.

Originally Posted by Philosopher8659

I have always thought that at the start of any creative display, and introduction should be given. One part of the introduction explains why one wants to take up someone's time with a given piece. Another is the purpose for writing it. Even the Judeo-Christian Scripture uses an introduction, however, because of its demonstration that introduction is not at the start of the text, however, it is included.
Human life is valuable, it is the only value we have. Thus some believe that it is out of respect that we measure our use of someone elses time against our need to take that time from them. If a person desires to waste time, no introduction is needed. Simply write on, but if communicating is important, then a certain amount of interpersonal respect is exchanged by the introduction.

Today, creative writing is seen through the eyes of a child, how clever one can be in heaping words together--yet as you mature you will come to understand that you are, in fact, exchanging life for life--and therefore you think in terms of value added or subtracted from anothers life through the time you ask them to spend with you.

This is why some works, like Aesops fables were important. All language is designed for the modifcation of human behavior such that that behavior maintains and promotes the life of the body. Thus, on some level, a good writer knows the distinction between good and evil, and know that they are exchanging time with the reader--and time is a measure of human life.

All true art then rests upon very clear principles that pertain to life itself. These principles separate that art from heaps of words, globs of paint, piles of stone.

When you understand this, you can see that it is not popularity that determines value--for if you helped billions waste man hours each of their life, you have contributed not as a great author, but as an infamous one. But contrasting this to a work of value, if if it helped but one person to see a little bit better, then you have done more than some of the most popular writers in history. Learn how, and then simply, do the math.

I never thought I would type these words, but Philosopher is absolutely right. Skeptic, take the time to understand what he's saying; it will most definitely help if your piece was anywhere close to the quality of your posts.