Hey Dreamviews! In real life I'm an aspiring songwriter. And though I've always had trouble putting words to my feelings, I think I am improving with everything I write. I come to you in hopes of receiving comments and critiques from other intelligent individuals. Any words of advice, praise, or criticism are welcome. Be as harsh as you'd like.

Watch your cigarette,
it ticks like and hourglass.
The paper burns and falls
and the carbon
hits the dust on the ground,
next to those tattered shoes
you keep as a memory
of the smoke that has passed.