More nitpicks which I haven't decided how they would be best fixed:

  • "Shift through walls" - it's not clear what this means, would "walk" be OK?
  • "There will be scientifically proven methods" - I think it needs to be more explicitly, e.g. "The book will contain" or "We will describe".
  • "the most general technique, known as a dream induced lucid dream". a) The acronym originates with Laberge where the "I" was initiated, not induced, which actually makes more sense. b) I think of a technique as a step-by-step guide: DILD is too general to qualify as a technique by my definition. [[I think it's right to explain about the ILD acronyms though; initially the book is going to be on the internet only and you can't escape ILDs on lucid dreaming sites.]]