Quote Originally Posted by Aristaeus View Post
Heh, an amusing conclusion (referring to "Pleading the Mountains").

This is fairly well-plotted for a short fictional story. Though the beginning does not immediately draw one in, the fear and excitement of the soon-following adventure is enough to keep one hooked to the end. That being said, however, the article(s) in general could, as you say, do with a little bit of revising--although that does not mean they are incomprehensible.

...But, anyhow, good work. You seem to have decent plotting skills; keep improving your writing and you may be able to form even more complex stories.
Oh wow, thank you! I didn't realize someone had replied.

Thanks a lot. I will definitely take your advice. Glad you liked the conclusion