My Short Stories

**KissWithAFist** · 01-07-2011 03:27 AM

So, I have 2 short stories. They were both school assignments, but I actually ended up growing fond of them. What do you think?

This is a memoir: Flash Flood - Story | Get More Stories at Quizilla

And this is fiction: Pleading the Mountains - Story | Get More Stories at Quizilla

I'd have to say that the first one is my favorite. I feel like the 2nd one is a little rushed, but I had a word limit, and not much time to revise it.

**Aristaeus** · 01-14-2011 08:06 AM

Heh, an amusing conclusion (referring to "Pleading the Mountains").

This is fairly well-plotted for a short fictional story. Though the beginning does not immediately draw one in, the fear and excitement of the soon-following adventure is enough to keep one hooked to the end. That being said, however, the article(s) in general could, as you say, do with a little bit of revising--although that does not mean they are incomprehensible.

...But, anyhow, good work. You seem to have decent plotting skills; keep improving your writing and you may be able to form even more complex stories.

**KissWithAFist** · 01-19-2011 05:50 AM

Originally Posted by Aristaeus

Heh, an amusing conclusion (referring to "Pleading the Mountains").

This is fairly well-plotted for a short fictional story. Though the beginning does not immediately draw one in, the fear and excitement of the soon-following adventure is enough to keep one hooked to the end. That being said, however, the article(s) in general could, as you say, do with a little bit of revising--although that does not mean they are incomprehensible.

...But, anyhow, good work. You seem to have decent plotting skills; keep improving your writing and you may be able to form even more complex stories.

Oh wow, thank you! I didn't realize someone had replied.

Thanks a lot. I will definitely take your advice. Glad you liked the conclusion