Pull Them From the Fire

**The** · 02-22-2011 02:20 PM

New story I wrote. I tried to take into consideration everything everyone told me. Please comment. This story is much longer that either of my earlier ones and is more mature in content.
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**Aristaeus** · 02-23-2011 11:32 PM

Whoa, this story has some deep stuff.

There are great improvements in this story over your previous ones; the narration and dialogue is much more rhythmical and colourful, making the story a captivating read from beginning to end. The primary characters, particularly the antagonist, are fairly interesting as well.

Overall, aside from a couple of typographical and punctuational errors, the story is very well written and plotted. Keep up the good work.

**The** · 02-25-2011 02:15 AM

Originally Posted by Aristaeus

Whoa, this story has some deep stuff.

There are great improvements in this story over your previous ones; the narration and dialogue is much more rhythmical and colourful, making the story a captivating read from beginning to end. The primary characters, particularly the antagonist, are fairly interesting as well.

Overall, aside from a couple of typographical and punctuational errors, the story is very well written and plotted. Keep up the good work.

Thank you. I was hoping you would comment because it seems like you put more thought into your review than just saying "you did good kid."