Thread: Struck by random inspiration.

So I was just sitting around thinking about drawing and a story started coming to mind, and after thinking about it enough I decided that it was at least worth writing down. I've got a rough draft of the premise written up, nothing too fancy, just focusing on the major plot points without much other content yet, I was just trying to get it all down while I still could. Right now it's a not-too-big wall of text. I don't think it has much potential to be more than a short story, but I think it could make a good comic/manga (especially manga-style, I like manga :3) because the main way I started picturing it was because I think it would thrive much more with a visual component. I don't really want to post it publicly yet because it's such an early-on idea, I was just hoping I could find some interested/bored enough people for some feedback. I can PM the draft to you and you can give some criticism back through PM or here (as long as it doesn't give too much away!) or whatever, if you're willing to give it a look. Let me know. All criticism welcome!

EDIT: I should add, it may be considered a little dark. It's really just a story for the sake of telling a story, if you get what I mean. Something that just popped into my head.