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      Inside I hide

      It only hurts me when I think about it. I hate this feeling. I thought i couldn't hurt.
      decisions of impurity run its course and im still standing,
      As much as I fight it, it only grows worse,
      It's been so long since I knew what it is like,
      to feel o.k. I must wander some more,
      wonder or wander I wonder,
      Can the search not find me in my weakened state?
      Will someone, anyone reach out a helping hand?,
      5 digits and a grasp to pull me out of the sand,
      It's just words, equals feelings and emotions,
      In turn to recieve what has been given and maybe more.

      What am I feeling? What am I missing?
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      Just a bunch of random letters that turned into random words.


      Are we dreaming?

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      I really like this poem. I am going through something rough right now and as I was reading it, I can see the despair of the writer and can relate.

      Will someone, anyone reach out a helping hand?,
      5 digits and a grasp to pull me out of the sand,
      [/b]
      I like this sentence a lot and I think many people will agree with this on those certain bad days.

      Overall, I really enjoyed how well you were expressing yourself and the sincerty of the words that produce such a mood in the poem.


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      Interesting poem. Although it's not really my usual thing. Plus it seems like so many poems are just depressing or have a very bleak note to them, to which this isn't an exception.

      But don't take any offense, cuz generally I don't like poetry at all.

      And by the way I think you made a mistake, not sure if it was purposeful, but in a poem, it stands out. Plus it's in a spot where it doesn't seem like it was done on purpose.

      It's been so long since I knew what it is like[/b]
      Should be "It's been so long since I knew what it was like" because 'knew' is past tense, and thus, 'is' shouldn't be there.

      I don't like being a grammar/spelling Nazi, but it's a poem, a work of english.

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      search for my other ones and then you'll know.


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      i like it
      420/24/7/365 herb?

      <div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(mayhembrown)</div>
      i tried to fly but cudnt, so i went outside in the garden but still cudnt.. i then thought lets go and find a girl!

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      So do I.

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