The Untitled Brady Baker Movie Project.

[bradybaker]

Ok, I've been getting ideas and junk together for a while now, and I've finally started to write my script. This is just the first couple scenes...and its a very rough draft...so don't judge too harshly. I would be very interested to hear what you guys think though. Funny? Shitty? Suggestions and analysis are welcome too. DISCLAIMER: This doesn't take as long to read as you might think. ----------------------------------------------------------- Scene 1: That movie opens with the main character sitting in a cheap coffee shop, staring into the camera. It’s morning. This is Stanley Dander. STAN (completely serious) Enjoy the show. The camera slowly rotates around the character until you see the other member of the conversation. EX-GIRLFRIEND Mildly disgusted look on face, pouring sugar into coffee Why do you always have to be so fuckin’ dramatic? STAN Oh, go to hell. I’ll be as dramatic as I fuckin’ please. Now pass the sugar. EX You’d think the entire world was crashing down around you the way you act. Shakes head, passes sugar What the hell are you even talkin’ about anyways? STAN (annoyed) I already explained it. Takes a bite of toast, food in mouth I feel like my entire fucking life is nothin’ but entertainment for everyone but me. EX (sarcastically) You’re such a victim. STAN (passively) Yeah, yeah. Pours sugar into coffee Enjoy the show, that’s all I’m sayin’ EX Packing up things Well I gotta go, thanks for the breakfast, maybe next time try to calm down a bit? STAN Whatever, have a good day at the ‘office’. She sighs loudly and stands EX Fuck you Stanley. Leaves Bell jingles as she opens door. Stan takes a sip of coffee and glances out window. Ex gives him the finger as she walks by window, Stan chuckles to himself, takes a sip of coffee and continues to stare out the window. A couple seconds pass, man walks past window (camera angle doesn’t change). Jingle of door is heard off to the side. Man comes and sits in empty seat across from Stan. This is Joel Hayes. JOEL Man, have you ever just stood and watched birds? There’s something goin’ on there that no one ever talks about. STAN Oh yeah? JOEL Yeah man. You never see it in the summer ‘cause the leaves get in the way, but in the fall, you can’t miss the little societies they have. STAN Societies? JOEL Next time you see a flock of birds all perched in a tree and shit, watch ‘em for a minute. Some of ‘em are grouped together like it’s a big party, others are sittin’ out on a limb by themselves. (pauses to think) You can’t help but feel sorry for the loner birds. STAN (bored, checks watch) Of course not. JOEL I’m thinkin’ that the birds perched higher up in the tree are part of a more elite social class too. (pauses to think) And every once in a while a little scrap breaks out and some other birds have to come break it up. STAN Looks at Joel. You’re persistent observation of the natural world never ceases to amaze me. JOEL Directly to Stan, pointing If you can’t appreciate the social hierarchy and law-and-order methods of birds, there’s no hope for you man. A couple seconds of silence pass as they stare at each other So did you fuck her again? STAN (sighs) Yeah…and I didn’t even want to, that’s the funny thing. (Joel laughs) But there’s no way you can stop that sort of thing once it starts, right? It’s completely beyond your control. I was sitting there, telling myself, “whatever you do, don’t have sex with this girl, you’ll only regret it”. But…here I am. JOEL (continues to chuckle) I wish I had your problems man. Why would you take her out for breakfast anyways? STAN I don’t know, I’m a weak person Joel. Besides, I knew that you’d be in here eventually. Good timing by the way. JOEL Looks around I’m fuckin’ hungry, have you eaten? Both look down at half-eaten breakfast End of Scene 1 Scene 2: Stan and Joel are walking down city street past various shops and such, light, Sunday morning traffic passes by. JOEL So why don’t you two just get back together already? You have sex more often than any normal couple. And apart from that, relationships are just food and movies. STAN Joel, you don’t get it. I can’t stand the woman. Everything about her irritates me. Not that it’s her fault or anything, we just aren’t compatible. She knows it, I know it. The only thing we agree on is sex. JOEL Strange facial expression, discomfort, fidgeting with tongue. Something’s wrong with my tongue dude, I have to keep moving it. STAN You’re fucked. The two friends approach a street corner. JOEL Anyways man, I should really get going -- as if I have somewhere to be. Really though, you should break things off with her permanently, it’s not good for you. But that’s just my opinion, and I don’t really know. So, whatever. STAN Thanks for your input. Joel looks up and down street Enjoy the show man. JOEL Huh? STAN Nevermind. Have a good one. JOEL Later, Stan. Walks off, yells without looking back Call me later! Joel leaves, Stan waits for lights to change so he can cross street, hands in pockets to keep warm. End of Scene 2 ------------------------------------------------------------------- So that's it. The basic (very basic) outline of the movie is that the main character, Stan, is generally unhappy with the way his life is turning out (I wouldn't call him depressed though). From there it evolves into a story of (I hate to say it) self-discovery...but not in a retarded, cliched sense...more in a Sideways (if you've seen the movie) type of way with no real solid conclusion. And maybe some Kaufman-esque oddity along the way...I'm stick working out the details.

[Seeker]

Cool! Looks like you have quite a bit of it worked out. I did a similar project a couple of years ago with my daughter. Julius Caesar, was a lot of work and we did exactly what you are doing, developing it scene by scene, with costumes and camera angles. Are you going to shoot it in sequence or are you going to develop a shooting order to minimize costume and set changes?

[Gwendolyn]

I can see you've really put some effort into this. I thought that first scene was pretty good. I like the concept...Keep working on it, and I'm sure you'll have a hell of a product.

[R.Carter]

I'm already intrigued. What show ? I thought the dialogue was realistic too. Sounds like the kind of conversation any of us could have . Good Luck !

[kimpossible]

Gotta cast John Travolta in the leading role there. It's definitely written for him.

[bradybaker]

Travolta eh? Might be too old...I wrote the Joel part with Jason Lee specifically in mind. So I need a Stan that's around the same age.

[Oneironaut Zero]

Sounding good, Brady. I love the way it opens up with "Enjoy the show," as if he's speaking into the audience and then rotates immediately into the rest of the conversation. Can't wait to read s'more of it.