Greed - Self explanatory |
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Hey, I've been writing poetry on and off for a little while now so I thought I'd post some of it up here. Any thoughts or criticism would be great |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Greed - Self explanatory |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
A poem about people who do whatever is popular simply to be popular and get twisted up in the lifestyle. |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
This is a song I've written for my metal band (not my calmer alternative rock band, wouldn't really fit lol) |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
No one has any criticism at all? |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
~Same squirrel, twice the carbs
Area of focus: Dream Recall (Since October 6th, 2008)
Current Goals: [x] Recall more than a fragment of a dream [ ] Recall more than one full dream in a single night
Last Dream Recalled: Amigos!
My Art Portfolio: Space Man Stuff (Short Poetry --> Phenomena --> Comedy)
You're poems are really good... could you write about something more cheerful perhaps? |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Buy The Ticket, Take The Ride |
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Last edited by Afterglow; 10-13-2008 at 06:33 AM.
When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
*Claps vigorously* |
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Haha thanks Sanquis! Glad you like it! |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Love the Hunter S. Thompson reference. I like the way you're able to make it rhyme, as well. |
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Last edited by Bearsy; 10-12-2008 at 05:28 PM.
When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Mirror Maze, a poem of indecision. |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
An Angel |
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Last edited by Afterglow; 03-03-2009 at 05:25 PM. Reason: spelling error :S
When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
LSD, a poem about the twisted drug |
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Last edited by Afterglow; 03-04-2009 at 02:52 AM.
When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Any more criticism would be very greatly appreciated |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Inertiatic Ways |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
You seem so small in the grander scale of things |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Try to break free from rhyming... it will give you more freedom. Not bad poems, but I feel as if you're really restricting yourself. |
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Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
Look out on a summers day,
with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.
Thanks for the criticism, Cold Blooded, I'll take all that in mind and try and expand my borders |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
I look forward to it. |
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Starry starry night, paint your pallet blue and gray,
Look out on a summers day,
with eyes that know the darkness of my soul.
Will do man, thanks heaps for the advice |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Haven't been here for a while, but let's give it a shot |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
Optimism once more is fleeting |
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When I was in high school I was very ambitious, I wanted to be the Class President but I missed out by only about 3 votes.
So they made me the Class Secretary of Defence.
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