Thread: Editing/Revisions/Proof-Reading Department

I can't wait to get started on this. It looks like Chapter 1,3 & 4 have the most progress (links in brianstorming thread)

I'll get started on going through what we have and post any revisions here. For those involved in this department please do the same and highlight any corrections in red. As stated above, let the orginal writer know that thier work as been revised.

Reporting for duty!

Originally Posted by CoLd BlooDed

Reporting for duty!

Thanks soildier! Your presence is appreciated!

Hey, pops.

i need this edited/read through

Tell me if there is anything i might need to add or change.

Spoiler for -:

[large]Placebos[/large]




A placebo is a sham medical intervention intended to lead the recipient to believe that it may improve his/her condition. In one common placebo procedure, a patient is given an inert sugar pill, told that it may improve his/her condition, but not told that it is in fact inert. Such an intervention may cause the patient to believe the treatment will change his/her condition; and this belief does indeed sometimes cause the patient's condition to improve. This phenomenon is known as the placebo effect.

Placebo - Something that has no effect but still works because you believe it will.

The Placebo Effect can also be used to effect dreaming.


Placebos can good or bad.



Bad Placebo: Saying your name in a dream will make you wake up.



Good placebo: Going to sleep with one eye covered.



Saying your name in a dream does not make you wake up. It will only do that if you believe it will.

Going to sleep with one eye covered will do nothing unless you believe it will.

That is the essense of placebos. If you believe it will happen, it will.


To have a placebo work you need to expect and believe 100% that it will happen. If you have any doubt in your mind, it will not work.


[large]History[/large]


The word placebo, Latin for "I shall please", dates back to a Latin translation of the Bible by Jerome. It was first used in a medicinal context in the 18th century. In 1785 it was defined as a "commonplace method or medicine" and in 1811 it was defined as "any medicine adapted more to please than to benefit the patient", sometimes with a derogative implication but not with the implication of no effect. Placebos were widespread in medicine until the 20th century, and they were sometimes endorsed as necessary deceptions. In 1903 Richard Cabot said that he was brought up to use placebos, but he ultimately concluded by saying that "I have not yet found any case in which a lie does not do more harm than good". In 1961 Henry Beecher found that patients of surgeons he categorized as enthusiasts relieved their patients' chest pain and heart problems more than skeptic surgeons. In 1961 Walter Kennedy introduced the word nocebo.

Originally Posted by Banana

i need this edited/read through

Tell me if there is anything i might need to add or change.

Spoiler for -:

[large]Placebos[/large]




A placebo is a sham medical intervention intended to lead the recipient to believe that it may improve his/her condition. In one common placebo procedure, a patient is given an inert sugar pill, told that it may improve his/her condition, but not told that it is in fact inert. Such an intervention may cause the patient to believe the treatment will change his/her condition; and this belief does indeed sometimes cause the patient's condition to improve. This phenomenon is known as the placebo effect.

Placebo - Something that has no effect but still works because you believe it will.

The Placebo Effect can also be used to effect dreaming.


Placebos can good or bad.



Bad Placebo: Saying your name in a dream will make you wake up.



Good placebo: Going to sleep with one eye covered.



Saying your name in a dream does not make you wake up. It will only do that if you believe it will.

Going to sleep with one eye covered will do nothing unless you believe it will.

That is the essense of placebos. If you believe it will happen, it will.


To have a placebo work you need to expect and believe 100% that it will happen. If you have any doubt in your mind, it will not work.


[large]History[/large]


The word placebo, Latin for "I shall please", dates back to a Latin translation of the Bible by Jerome. It was first used in a medicinal context in the 18th century. In 1785 it was defined as a "commonplace method or medicine" and in 1811 it was defined as "any medicine adapted more to please than to benefit the patient", sometimes with a derogative implication but not with the implication of no effect. Placebos were widespread in medicine until the 20th century, and they were sometimes endorsed as necessary deceptions. In 1903 Richard Cabot said that he was brought up to use placebos, but he ultimately concluded by saying that "I have not yet found any case in which a lie does not do more harm than good". In 1961 Henry Beecher found that patients of surgeons he categorized as enthusiasts relieved their patients' chest pain and heart problems more than skeptic surgeons. In 1961 Walter Kennedy introduced the word nocebo.

Close Banana, close. There were just a couple of spelling mistakes, nothing serious. Here is the edited result that you can use:

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[large]Placebos - [Edited by Shades][/large]




A placebo is a sham medical intervention intended to lead the recipient to believe that it may improve his/her condition. In one common placebo procedure, a patient is given an inert sugar pill, told that it may improve his/her condition, but not told that it is in fact inert. Such an intervention may cause the patient to believe the treatment will change his/her condition; and this belief does indeed sometimes cause the patient's condition to improve. This phenomenon is known as the placebo effect.

Placebo - Something that has no effect but still works because you believe it will.

The Placebo Effect can also be used to effect dreaming.


Placebos can good or bad.



Bad Placebo: Saying your name in a dream will make you wake up.



Good placebo: Going to sleep with one eye covered.



Saying your name in a dream does not make you wake up. It will only do that if you believe it will.

Going to sleep with one eye covered will do nothing unless you believe it will.

That is the essence of placebos. If you believe it will happen, it will.


To have a placebo work you need to expect and believe 100% that it will happen. If you have any doubt in your mind, it will not work.


[large]History[/large]


The word placebo, Latin for "I shall please", dates back to a Latin translation of the Bible by Jerome. It was first used in a medicinal context in the 18th century. In 1785 it was defined as a "commonplace method or medicine" and in 1811 it was defined as "any medicine adapted more to please than to benefit the patient", sometimes with a derogative implication but not with the implication of no effect. Placebos were widespread in medicine until the 20th century, and they were sometimes endorsed as necessary deceptions. In 1903 Richard Cabot said that he was brought up to use placebos, but he ultimately concluded by saying that "I have not yet found any case in which a lie does not do more harm than good". In 1961 Henry Beecher found that patients of surgeons he categorized as enthusiasts relieved their patients' chest pain and heart problems more than sceptic surgeons. In 1961 Walter Kennedy introduced the word nocebo.

edit:



Here it is

Spoiler for The Dream World:

[large]The Dream World[/large]


The dream world can sometimes be very confusing and odd.


Your voice can be different, mirrors are odd or frightening, The geography of the area or the architecture of a place can be significantly different than in the real world. If you can begin to improve your overall awarness of yourself and the environment around you, that will be a big step towards lucidity.

The dream world can sometimes be frightening but there is no need to be afraid of anything in dreams. None of it is real and is all just your subconcious creating images for you to see. If you start to get frightened just think or say to yourself "None of this is real. I am in control of everything." If you do that, nothing will be firghtening anymore and you are free to do whatever you want.

Originally Posted by Banana

i need this edited/read through

Tell me if there is anything i might need to add or change.

Spoiler for -:

[large]Placebos[/large]




A placebo is a [[-sham]] medical intervention intended to lead the recipient to believe that it may [actually] improve his/her condition. In one common placebo procedure [the] patient is given a [[-inert]] sugar pill, told that it may improve his/her condition, but not told that it is inert. Such an intervention may cause the patient to believe the treatment will change his/her condition; and this belief [alone has shown to sometimes improve condition of said individual]. This phenomenon is known as the Placebo Effect, [and can also be used to [a]ffect dreaming.]

Placebo - [a substance] that has no [active] effect but [prescribed moreso for the mental relief (than the problem itself) of whomever uses it].

[[-The Placebo Effect can also be used to [a]ffect dreaming.]]

Placebos can [work both negatively and positively].

[Example of a] Bad Placebo: [s]aying your name in a dream will make you wake up.

[Example of a] Good [P]lacebo: [g]oing to sleep with one eye covered.



Saying your name in a dream does not make you wake up. [You can only succeed if you truly believe it will.]

Going to sleep with one eye covered will do nothing unless you believe it will.

[This] is the essen[c]e of placebos. If you believe it will, [it will happen].

[Placebo succession stems from your personal expectation and belief that it does work 100%. Not a doubt in your head is permitted.


[large]History[/large]

The word placebo, Latin for "I shall please", dates back to a Latin translation of the Bible by Jerome. It was first used in a medicinal context in the 18th century. In 1785 it was defined as a "commonplace method or medicine" and in 1811 it was defined as "any medicine adapted more to please than to benefit the patient", sometimes with a derogative implication [instead of] the implication of no effect. Placebos were widespread in medicine until the 20th century, and [even then] they were sometimes endorsed as necessary deceptions. In 1903 Richard Cabot claimed he was brought up to use placebos, but he ultimately concluded by saying that "I have not yet found any case in which a lie does not do more harm than good". In 1961 Henry Beecher found that patients of surgeons he categorized as enthusiasts relieved their patients' chest pain and heart problems more than skeptic surgeons. In 1961 Walter Kennedy introduced the word nocebo.

I think you might want to reword the 'Good placebo/Bad placebo' bit... I was going to rewrite it but I don't even know what you're trying to say there. You basically said they're the exact same thing even though you divided them into good and bad.

This better?

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[large]Placebos - [Edited by Shades][/large]




A placebo is a sham medical intervention intended to lead the recipient to believe that it may improve his/her condition. In one common placebo procedure, a patient is given an inert sugar pill, told that it may improve his/her condition, but not told that it is in fact inert. Such an intervention may cause the patient to believe the treatment will change his/her condition; and this belief does indeed sometimes cause the patient's condition to improve. This phenomenon is known as the placebo effect.

Placebo - Something that has no effect but still works because you believe it will.

The Placebo Effect can also be used to effect dreaming.


Placebos can have positive and negative effects



Negative Placebo: Saying your name in a dream will make you wake up.



Positive placebo: Going to sleep with one eye covered will make you have dreams about flying.



Saying your name in a dream does not make you wake up. It will only do that if you believe it will.

Going to sleep with one eye covered will do nothing unless you believe it will.

That is the essence of placebos. If you believe it will happen, it will.


To have a placebo work you need to expect and believe 100% that it will happen. If you have any doubt in your mind, it will not work.


[large]History[/large]


The word placebo, Latin for "I shall please", dates back to a Latin translation of the Bible by Jerome. It was first used in a medicinal context in the 18th century. In 1785 it was defined as a "commonplace method or medicine" and in 1811 it was defined as "any medicine adapted more to please than to benefit the patient", sometimes with a derogative implication but not with the implication of no effect. Placebos were widespread in medicine until the 20th century, and they were sometimes endorsed as necessary deceptions. In 1903 Richard Cabot said that he was brought up to use placebos, but he ultimately concluded by saying that "I have not yet found any case in which a lie does not do more harm than good". In 1961 Henry Beecher found that patients of surgeons he categorized as enthusiasts relieved their patients' chest pain and heart problems more than sceptic surgeons. In 1961 Walter Kennedy introduced the word nocebo.