Thread: Passing Strange

Originally Posted by Darkmatters

God is Gut?

LMAO. Brilliant.

Still loving the story, man! You absolutely have a talent for imagery, and your writing style has a very classic, authentic, light-hearted-folklore type of flair to it (if that makes any sense). I'm actually starting to miss a little more of the dream-like nuances in the tale (although the spider-vision was awesome, and I liked the 'dream within a dream' concept about it). Not to say that the story is getting dull at all (so don't take it that way!), but I'd say the best way I could put it is to compare it to the Matrix and the Matrix Reloaded. I loved Matrix Reloaded, but one main drawback for me was that it lost a lot of that 'tumbling down the rabbit hole' feel to it, that the first one had. I think it's possible to keep that kind of intrigue going - and if anyone can do it, you can - so I just thought I'd throw it out there, as something to think about.

Keep it up!

Originally Posted by Oneironaut

it lost a lot of that 'tumbling down the rabbit hole' feel to it, that the first one had. I think it's possible to keep that kind of intrigue going - and if anyone can do it, you can - so I just thought I'd throw it out there, as something to think about.

Keep it up!

You know you're right. I also miss that more surreal dreamlike feel of the early chapters. And it's coming back, I swear it!

Heh, I really did get caught up in plot and character and story details for quite a few chapters didn't I? And... other stuff that was a lot of fun too. But yeah, I notice I've even gone to the extent now of showing the passage of time by the position of the sun and stuff like that - which is relevant normally but not so much in a story that's a series of dreams!

My excuse is this - you know how some dreams are bizarre and strange, and some are more vivid and realistic? Yeah... that's my excuse! Lol when I think about it, in the beginning I was never going to have an open sky - it was always going to be as if every scene took place in a cavern underground or something (I think I came up with that because of the way the story opened, with going underground through tunnels within tunnels and all).

OK well, basically the long traveling scene is almost over now - just one final short leg left. It's been a nice break, filled with weird sexual romps and comic relief and all, but it's time to get back into it for reals now. And as soon as I finish up my Fruitista Freeze (damn Taco Bell is good!) it's right back to the writing board.

Write on!