Thread: Deep Within - MoS's submission to the DV Story Challenge

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03-27-2008 02:48 AM #2

Abra

I am become fish pear

Your story is enthralling, and had me on the edge of my seat. Nice, vivid descriptions, and also great little touches (referring to the wolf as "it" instead of "he" after the transformation). Nice end to the chapter, too. =D

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Abraxas

Originally Posted by OldSparta

I murdered someone, there was bloody everywhere. On the walls, on my hands. The air smelled metallic, like iron. My mouth... tasted metallic, like iron. The floor was metallic, probably iron