Thread: OPEN BETA - Open beta TWOTLD - Day 0

Also, could someone show me

some of your vocabulary stumped me

Please don't take this the wrong way, but in my opinion, this is way, way overwritten.

Mouth-watering of the finest - little bit too verbose at times

Honestly if you take it as he said, he is a chemical engineer presenting his findings and giving you (the beta-test subjects) the rundown.

Also, i dont think he is here for writing advice. he will show it to an editor after his final draft, not a bunch of randos like us on the internet.

Originally Posted by BrandonBoss

Also, i dont think he is here for writing advice. he will show it to an editor after his final draft, not a bunch of randos like us on the internet.

Actually, I am a professional writer. My pen name is: Freelance Rando!

He "liked" my post, so I figure I wasn't too far out of line, and the book I suggested is a gem.

@Ginsan. It is as we feared. Ginsan finally went crazy.

Originally Posted by Nailler

Actually, I am a professional writer. My pen name is: Freelance Rando!

He "liked" my post, so I figure I wasn't too far out of line, and the book I suggested is a gem.

Good point. You didn't say something was wrong, you genuinely tried to help.

I wasn't saying y'all were wrong or mean, I just don't see the overwriting. None of y'all were rude about it.

Originally Posted by BrandonBoss

@Ginsan. It is as we feared. Ginsan finally went crazy.

I didn't know how to respond except for repeating myself, so I just put in some dancing cows = D

Originally Posted by Ginsan

I didn't know how to respond except for repeating myself, so I just put in some dancing cows = D

Gotcha. Check out the story of Richard Fosbury. I am not saying that this will revolutionize LDing forever, but what if it does?

Originally Posted by Ginsan

I didn't know how to respond except for repeating myself, so I just put in some dancing cows = D

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You can never have too many dancing cows.
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