Quote Originally Posted by Meeps View Post
I don't know... I'm a bit shy about it
And in general paranoid about posting school stuff on the internet before sending it in..

But I can give the broad structure:
Graph 1: I talk about what people say about me
Graph 2: I talk about my undergrad studies & year abroad in Vancouver
Graph 3: I talk about my grad studies & master's thesis right now
Graph 4: career prospects
Graph 5: motivation of my choice of program & university

And it's 511 words. (one page)
My English isn't good so I can't help you with the proofreading. But I think what people said about you shouldn't be placed at the first paragraph. That probably comes in at the last paragraph so you would appear more humble. Motivation of your choice of program and university is important to me so I would make sure I write that well as that leaves a good impression to people. The others are fine.